Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/Yoshi
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[edit] Yoshi
I've taken a look at this article after seeing it on the Nintendo portal and it seems like it's lacking in some detail as well as sources in the earlier sections. Some of the sections just before more recent edits was not very good and I reckon Yoshi could do with a closer look. BigHairRef | Talk 01:36, 18 November 2006 (UTC)
- The "Species" and "Habitat" sections need to be written with an out-of-universe perspective. Also, they could easily be merged into a single section, "character description" for instance.
- The references need to be cleaned up. They should all be bottom-page refs instead of links to outside pages in the text. Giving a list of game manuals at the end of the article is not acceptable; each statement in the article that is based on something in a manual should be individually referenced.
- A section on how the character was conceived and developed would be very useful and relevant, if sources on this can be found.
- The "Yoshi's Friends & Helpers" section is just bad. It's a list of characters that... what? Appeared in Yoshi games? Helped Yoshi somehow? It should be rewritten in prose instead of a list, making its purpose clear, and losing the FAQ-ish feel of the current section. It could be, for example, a paragraph or two about how other characters can affect Yoshi, along with one or two examples.
That's all I got for now. Good luck! -- Ritchy 21:23, 7 December 2006 (UTC)