Wikipedia:WikiProject Novels/Peer review/Pattern Recognition (novel)

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[edit] Pattern Recognition (novel)

Science fiction novel published in 2003. Is it comprehensive? The writing involved a lot of synthesis from many sources, so I have the fear that some points get lost or mashed up with others. Please see if everything makes sense, that the points are complete and understandable. I've kept track of what came from where by using ample footnotes, so I can backtrack. Also, check if the writing flows well, or where the problematic areas are. --maclean 07:33, 22 January 2008 (UTC)

Great start; lots of good info! Kudos on the research! I only have a few basic suggestions:
  • Move the second paragraph in the lead down into the Background section; it clutters up the lead, and seems to fit better below.
  • Some of the info in the Background section seems unrelated. I'd remove the parts about Gibson's other novels unless they are directly related to Pattern Recognition, and maybe the sentence explaining who Gibson is. These are better explained in their respective articles.
  • There are a few items in the lead which should be sourced, or re-written to avoid weasel-words. I've marked these in the article with citation tags.
FusionKnight (talk) 16:58, 22 January 2008 (UTC)
  • Alright, thanks. The lead section is supposed to be an overview of the article, so I will go through and ensure it adequately reflects it. I will add some citations to the lead to back up some of those claims. In the "Background" I'm trying to provide context for how/when the book was written, so I'll try to relate it all to this novel. --maclean 05:11, 23 January 2008 (UTC)