Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Roman-Persian Wars

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[edit] Roman-Persian Wars

After extensive rewriting of the article, I need some feedback, and a "cooler" look than mine. What is left to be done? What is missing?

I don't know if there can be any help with the translation of these two excellent maps in the German wiki, that would enrich the English article, Bild:Julian vs Persien.png and Bild:Justinian Byzanz.png.--Yannismarou (talk) 17:38, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Oberiko

It looks quite good, well referenced and having a sensible framework. A few suggestions:
  • I think it'd help to have a "background" section, briefly discussing the rise of the Romans and Persians and how they initially came into conflict.
  • Background section treating the Roman ambitions in the East and the Persian revival under the Parthians added.--Yannismarou (talk) 12:15, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
  • I don't think you need to include "See also: Parthia#Conflicts with Rome", almost of that content should already be included in Roman-Parthian Wars and it would look cleaner to have just the one link.
  • Maps which show the relative size of both empires would be beneficial, right now they're a bit sporadic and include only one of the factions at a time. Ideally, an animated map showing the fluctuations of both empires over time would be best.
  • The two German maps above would be of great profit for the article. But any way to translate them?!--Yannismarou (talk) 13:31, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
  • For such a broad topic spanning centuries, I would recommend pruning out the names of all but the most important individuals (emperors and such). Most of the time it appears that an individual is introduced, with no background, and then not seen again.
  • Trying to keep the names of the emperors and of the most important general.--Yannismarou (talk) 13:31, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
  • I think the Roman-Sassanid Wars section goes into too much detail. I would imagine that it warrants its own article (which it mostly has), especially as the Romans had divided into two quite independent political entities.
  • The tactics section should include a few more of the relative strengths of the two empires. Superior Roman engineering (i.e. siege equipment and fortifications) should likely be mentioned.
  • Relevant info are gradually incorporated.--Yannismarou (talk) 16:31, 24 May 2008 (UTC)
Oberiko (talk) 19:40, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Dhatfield

This comment has moved to a historical map tutorial.

Reasons why this does not look the same as / as good as Captain Blood's German version is that the projection is different - Captain Blood uses the source elevation maps and texture data and renders the projection himself. That is too hardcore for me. Sadly, he is inactive. As for the rest of his techniques, you now have the answer. Good luck, if you have any problems drop me a talk. Dhatfield (talk) 21:54, 27 May 2008 (UTC)

Thanks a lot for this great advice!--Yannismarou (talk) 14:07, 29 May 2008 (UTC)