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[edit] Battle of Schellenberg

I have just rewritten the Battle of Schellenberg - the 'warm up act' to the main event the Battle of Blenheim. I found it harder to write (much less info available then the bigger Blenheim battle), so I would be interested in your responses. Thanks.Raymond Palmer 13:27, 27 August 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Very nice! A few things that still need work, though:

  • More footnotes! For an article of this length, ~60–70 would not be inappropriate; in particular, every substantive paragraph needs to have at least one (and ideally multiple) citations, or you'll see no end of "undercited" criticism at FAC.
  • Links to sections of other articles should actually work like this.
  • The lead could probably be lengthened to summarize a bit more of the article.
  • Quotes in the body of the text need to be introduced better; simply having a quotation followed by a name only works for epigraphs.
  • The Franco-Bavarian commanders should be linked; I would assume they're deserving of articles, even if they don't presently have them.

Kirill Lokshin 17:26, 27 August 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

Very good article. Minor remarks:

  • Kirill is right. If you go for FAC, you need more citations. Some parts of the article are really under-citated.
  • Try, wherever possible, to place the citations at the end of the sentence and not in the middle of it. You'll face criticisms that you interrupt the flow of the reading. Even if the citation is within the sentence, try to place it after a punctuation.
  • I'm a bit concerned about the small number of references, but, as you say, this is not the "main" battle and, thus, it may be indeed difficult to trace further bibliography.
  • In "Cultural references" you name only Joseph Addison. Aren't there any other cultural references?
  • As Kirill pointed out, you must incorporate the citations into the flow of your prose.--Yannismarou 17:57, 27 August 2006 (UTC)
Thank you both. I have ammended the article accordingly. I fear it is a forlorn hope of finding more cultural references; and more info, even for a stub, on one of the Franco-Bavarian commanders is also proving very hard. I may nominate for FAC because I want to try a larger project so feedback for this will be helpful. Raymond Palmer 15:17, 29 August 2006 (UTC)