Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Battle of Golymin

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[edit] Battle of Golymin

As I intend to contribute more in a similar style I would be grateful for some guidence that I am getting it right. Two specific questions are - Is there too much detail? Is the list of forces engaged appropriate for the article?

The Stratigic Situation bit could be moved to a seperate, longer, article on the Campaign in Poland 1806 with map(s)- but at present I have not got the time!

Andrewshobley 13:26, 21 December 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Kirill Lokshin

Quite nice. Some general suggestions:

• The lead could stand to be a little longer; it should (succinctly) summarize all the major points of the article.
• Headings should be formatted per the MOS; in particular, a leading "The" should generally be omitted.
• A lot of the choppier sections (weather, site, analysis) could be merged into the surrounding prose. There's no need to create a new section for every topic being discussed.
• The same can be said for the choppy (often one-sentence) paragraphs, particularly in the latter portion of the article.
• More citations are needed in various parts of the article; see WP:MILHIST#CITE. Particularly worrying is the appearance of uncited historiographical judgements (e.g. "Stolarski’s article appears to make too many assumptions about the Russian order of battle at Eylau to be reliable").
• The order of battle should really be given before the narrative of the battle itself, and would probably work better as a table than as a bulleted list.
• Are any suitable images available? If nothing else, portraits of the commanders can be used to add some color. The two maps should probably be spaced out a bit more, and shifted onto opposite margins.

Keep up the good work! Kirill Lokshin 18:27, 21 December 2006 (UTC)