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[edit] 53rd Pennsylvania Infantry

When this article was initially created, it appeared to be just a copy-and-paste job from another webiste. I've tried to bring it more in line with other similar Wikipedia articles (adding an infobox, links to other articles, etc.) and have also extensively edited and rewrote it. Any further suggestions for improvement (and corrections of errors) would be greatly appreciated. Wild Wolf (talk) 18:55, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Roger Davies

I'm sorry if this turns out to be a damper but this article has several very substantial problems.

  • It still contains significant amounts of text that remain cuts and pastes from the source webpage. These need re-writing in your own words.
  • The webpage itself is probably not a reliable source. You should look for other sources to support what the article says. The upside is that will give you more information.
  • The article isn't properly cited or sourced. See WP:V for what to cite and WP:CITE for how to cite it.
  • It needs breaking up into sections for readability. A lead section to set the scene, followed by three or four sections, dealing with the regiment's formation, battle honours, and so forth.

The way forward is probably to ask for assistance on the talk page of the American Civil War task force. It has many experienced, knowledgeable and helpful editors. --ROGER DAVIES talk 20:56, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Red Harvest

I agree with the above.

  • Many of the web pages on the topic reference Samuel Bates' History of the Pennsylvania Volunteers, 1861-65 published in 1868. This would be public domain if you can be certain that passages are taken from the original.
  • Dyer's Compendium contains lists of dates and actions for the regiment. Fox's losses and the Official records should also be cited where appropriate to confirm the material gathered from other web pages, etc.
  • The history section definitely should be broken up into headings or subheadings. Red Harvest (talk) 21:31, 5 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Carom

A few supplementary comments:

  • You may actually find it more productive to start from scratch. Locate some reliable sources (the ACW task force may be a good place to start), identify a useful structure (3rd Battalion 3rd Marines might serve as a model of sorts), and produce some prose of your own - you may find it easier than attempting to rework someone else's.
  • You will also want to keep in mind things like proper citation format, etc. as you move forward.
  • I don't know if images are available, but they are always a bonus.

Best of luck. Carom (talk) 00:16, 6 March 2008 (UTC)


[edit] Leobold1

I'm more of a detail and link expansion person.

  • I did make 2 very minor edits to fix the link for William H. French and Israel B. Richardson. It was written as [[William. H. French]] with a period after William, and missing the middle initial for Richardson. These were quick and easy fixes and would have been stupid to write it out telling you rather than make the edit.
  • More info on the "Grapevine Bridge" could be helpful (what kind of bridge, distance, etc). Also a link through to the Chickahominy River could help show where the bridge was built.
  • Links for:
    • the First Battle of Bull Run instead of just telling about it.
    • City, location, and unit links are varied. Some have a link, some don't. Even a red link, at times, is better than none.
    • Make another pass through the names to make sure all the people involved don't have articles on them.
    • Parts of the Union Army the regiment was attached to (II Corps, AOP, etc)
  • The first few paragraphs under "Fredericksburg and Gettysburg" need to be rewritten. The regiment is at the battle before the battle is mentioned.
  • A Google search for images (along with other references) would be extremely helpful.
  • Prose is uneven. The article reads like it was written by at least 3 people, the originator (Copy & Paste), you, and you trying to fix the copy & paste. This makes it read very uneven.
  • Check out these links. You don't need a library or a large booksshelf for these. Google Books search for 53rd Pennsylvania Infantry
  • Little more on the reenactors would be helpful.

I realize I'm nitpicky, but these are the things that jumped at me.

Leobold1 (talk) 20:24, 6 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Daysleeper47

I created and did 99% of the work on 11th New York Volunteer Infantry Regiment which can serve as a model for your work. Please feel free to take a look at it and use its style to mirror this article. It is currently a GA (which the previously mentioned 3rd Battalion 3rd Marines is an FA) but is a more relevant comparison as a Union regiments. Regards, Daysleeper47 (talk) 19:43, 17 March 2008 (UTC)