Wikipedia:WikiProject LGBT studies/Peer review/Lily Parr

The following discussion is an archived debate of the proposed deletion of the article below. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as the article's talk page or in a deletion review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was completed. -- SatyrTN (talk | contribs) 17:27, 14 August 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Lily Parr

I've added a considerable number of edits, read the books and got photos from one of the authors. Lat month there was nothing on this lady, now it's time for a review.....I think...

Fluffball70 00:34, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

First thing I noticed is the citation in the article needs some work. Consider using <ref> tags and a <references/> tag (see Wikipedia:Footnotes and WP:CITE) for more information). I strongly recommend making use of citation templates to help ensure the proper formatting is followed (see Category:Citation_templates). If you need any help, please drop me a note on my talk page. If you need an example to work from, University of Oklahoma does a good job in how its sources are cited. -- Ash Lux ^{(talk | contribs)} 07:37, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

After a quick read over (it's nearly 2AM here, so hopefully this is right and makes sense):

• Not every appearance of St Helens, Merseyside needs to be wiki-linked.
• The acronym "FA" is used in the section "Career" without first informing the reader what FA means.
• Phrases like "one of the greatest British Female Football legends" are not a neutral point of view.
• Would "The Dick, Kerr's Ladies Team" and "Life after Dick, Kerr & Co." be better suited as a subsection of "Career"?
• Is there any more information outside of her career you could add?
• What is her connection to LGBT?
• Mention the date of her death in the lead-in. -- Ash Lux ^{(talk | contribs)} 08:02, 4 March 2007 (UTC)

There's no section on her personal life. Is there any info out there on that? Dev920 (Have a nice day!) 20:39, 5 March 2007 (UTC)

Good. Is there anything on her early life? Where she was born, who her parents were, education upbringing etc.? As a slight personal interest, what was her religion? Dev920 (Have a nice day!) 18:33, 6 March 2007 (UTC)

I hope I've fixed all of the above! Fluffball70 00:49, 11 March 2007 (UTC)