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Contents 1 National Institute of Technology, Srinagar 1.1 User:RegentsPark 1.1.1 Lead 1.1.2 History 1.1.3 The Institute 1.1.4 Facilities 1.1.5 Missing

[edit] National Institute of Technology, Srinagar

I have nominated this article for peer review because I feel that this article can be further improved in terms of its quality as well as its quantity. Any piece of advice would of great help.
Rohit Reddy™ (talk) 14:46, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

[edit] User:RegentsPark

Needs some copyediting. Not a whole lot but I see quite a few articles before proper nouns.

[edit] Lead

Lead is too short. I'm not sure what you can say about it - perhaps something about how it compares with its peers (if any) in the region.

[edit] History

I guess its ok. A bit bland though. Surely something interesting has happened in the course of its 48 year history? Srinagar is a place where interesting things happen.

[edit] The Institute

This section is weak. Lots of peacock words. Example: "The Institute has won recognition as an important National Institute in the field of Technical Education and has been playing a pivotal role in the development of the Kashmir region." If it has won recognition, the form of that recognition should be stated (an award or awards?). If it has played a pivotal role, then the role should be described. To be honest, I don't think you need this section. Some of the material can go into the lead, some into history, and some into facilities.

[edit] Facilities

Watch out for words like excellent and well equipped with no descriptions! My opinion, there is too much information. Not much point in listing indoor games, for example. You can better use the space by adding things that are missing (see below).

[edit] Missing

There is nothing about academics and courses; nothing about research at the institute; nothing about administration and finances; nothing about student life at the institute; nothing about alumni; and nothing about the elephant in the room (how have the troubles in Kashmir affected the institute). --RegentsPark (talk) 03:14, 3 May 2008 (UTC)