Wikipedia:WikiProject Films/Peer review/Keane (film)

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[edit] Keane (film)

Hi, this is my first stab at writing an article from scratch and i just wanted to run it by people for your comments and views. This article did exist before i edited it but it literally was only one very short paragraph with no infobox or anything. Thanks Murphy Inc 09:44, 20 May 2007 (UTC)

It's certainly an excellent start to an article. However, I think the one major problem with it at the moment is the "Interpretation" section. There are no cited sources for this, so it all seems like speculation or original research at the moment. This either needs backing up with cited critical comment on these interpretations, or else removing altogether. Angmering 15:32, 20 May 2007 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback, i have changed this section now and think it is much better. Thanks Murphy Inc 01:49, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

Another issue is the images from the films — you claim they're low resolution in the rationale but they seem pretty big to me. Also, the aspect ratios on them are horrible; everything's suqeezed vertically. Angmering 06:36, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

Good call, this has been rectified now. I have carried out a redraft of the article and cleared up some errors i have noticed myself, i think this article is pretty much complete, i cannot think of anything else needed.Murphy Inc 22:59, 21 May 2007 (UTC)

[edit] More work been done to get this article up to scratch

Hi, i was wondering whether this could be looked at again now i have made changes as requested above, thanks Murphy Inc 10:34, 28 May 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Doctor Sunshine

• I did some copyediting but I think it still needs some more. I don't like the "we see" bit under plot. Metaphors and adjectives should be avoided to achieve an encyclopedic tone.
• In the plot there seems to be some interpretation, especially the breakdown bit. Either find a way to rewrite that or a reference from a review might work.
• The images are rather dark and vertically stretched. Consider using images from the imdb or here.
• Also, the images need a source (the DVD, or the links above if you use those) and fair use rationale.
• The festivals and awards need to be mentioned after the lead, probably an awards section would be best as the cinematographer nomination sentence should go in a section like that.
• This may just be me, but I don't like the use of Rotten Tomatoes percentages. They're a hassle to keep updated and seem lazy. A fair representation of reviews with quotes and such would be better.
• The last reference should be fleshed out with a cite template. Including the DVD company as the publisher, etc.

Otherwise, looking good. Doctor Sunshine talk 03:24, 4 June 2007 (UTC)