Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Steve Nash

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[edit] Steve "Cahoots" Nash

Hi i am putting this article up for a peer review at the bequest of Warrush. I am sure that all comments will be greatly appreciated. Thanks Woodym555 18:03, 21 June 2007 (UTC)

From a quick review, I can tell you a few things:

• Needs to be referenced more thoroughly. The introduction for instance, has no citations at all. The Early life section is also in need of better referencing. As a general guideline, you should have at least one reference per fact/group of related facts. For instance "While in college, he played for the Canadian National Team" should be referenced, since that is a complete thought. (See WP:CITE for more detail)
• Along the same lines, you should use citation templates wherever possible.
• I also noticed some prose issues, some of which don't sound very objective or encyclopedic ("Nash continues to be the pivot of one of the league's most potent offensive teams." for example. Which is true, but is worded as if it is a point-of-view rather than a fact.)

All in all a pretty good job - lots of good information and a pretty broad scope - just needs to be cleaned up wherever possible.

Good luck! Drewcifer3000 09:34, 7 July 2007 (UTC)