Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Shigeru Miyamoto

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[edit] Shigeru Miyamoto

Well, here goes nothing. I've noticed that it had failed to get a FAC, most likely due to the fact that it's not even a GA article. I've noticed the criticism was that there were hardly any references in the article. There was a large trivia section earlier. So I had moved the important parts from the trivia and added to the main article and removed the unneccesary trivia from the article. What I would like to know is if this article is anywhere near a GA status or if it is. magiciandude (Talk) (review) 17:25, 1 September 2007 (UTC)

Another problem I just noticed is too many external links. magiciandude (Talk) (review) 17:52, 1 September 2007 (UTC)

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