Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Joseph Szigeti

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[edit] Joseph Szigeti

I've been working on this article for a while now and my eventual goal is to get it up to Featured Article status. I think it's getting close to being a potential FA candidate, but I'd like any input on how to make it better. Thanks, K. Lásztocskatalk 19:51, 3 January 2008 (UTC)

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 18:00, 4 January 2008 (UTC)

Thanks. Anything else? K. Lásztocskatalk 04:38, 7 January 2008 (UTC)