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[edit] John Floyd (Virginia politician)

Expanded this from a little stub and would love outside viewpoints, especially anyone familiar with this period in US history (Clay, Calhoun and Jackson era). Would like to nominate it for GA soon, so all comments welcome! Also, I have not even tapped his diary yet and am wondering if I should... --plange 04:21, 11 September 2006 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

I think that GA is not going to be a major problem. Thereby, I'll be a bit more "stringent" and I'll comment on the article based on FA criteria:

  • The main problem is that you rely on (almost) a single source. This is very poor for FA (I'm not sure for GA). You can use his diary as a reference. Do it!
  • Section "War of 1812" is too short. For FA such sections are not recommended. You could expand it or merge it.
  • Section "Marriage and children" may also be a problem. I'm not sure if it can stand as a seperate section. Do you have extra information about his personal life? You can merge it with "Early Years", if you think it appropriate.
  • I think external links are recommended to go after references. And since you have only one external link, I'm not sure if you need this section.
  • You have many long quotes within the prose. For GA I donot think this is a problem. But if you go for FA, you may face criticisms.
  • I'd like to see a section about the legacy of Floyd (assessments etc.). But I donot know the availability of sources.
  • You could expand a bit the lead section.--Yannismarou 17:51, 12 September 2006 (UTC)
Thanks!
  • I've combined War of 1812 and marriage into "Family and early life"
  • Moved external links
  • Added some legacy but not sure what kind of stuff goes there typically?
Stuff about his impact in the next generations. About the way his work influenced the future. What's left behind him?--Yannismarou 08:10, 14 September 2006 (UTC)
  • expanded lead a bit
--plange 03:10, 14 September 2006 (UTC)