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[edit] Evanescence

I'd like to know if this article can become FA, and if not, what does it need? I'd also like to know what are the positive and negative things of the article. Armando.Otalk · Ev · 3K 22:51, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] LuciferMorgan

It's main obstacle would be criterion 1a, since it needs a copyedit. Some of the sentences are overly long. LuciferMorgan (talk) 19:23, 24 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] M3tal H3ad

  • Remove Grammy-winning from the first sentence as its POV - glorifying the subject and you mention grammys in the second paragraph
  • Evanescence was founded by singer, pianist and songwriter Amy Lee and former lead guitarist and songwriter Ben Moody - He was not a "former" member when he joined
  • Meanwhile, Evanescence signed on with their first major label - reword "signed on"
  • Fallen spent 43 weeks on the Billboard Top 10 - when was it released, what was its peak position
  • has been certified 6x Platinum;[10] and has sold more than 15 million copies worldwide,[2] including 6.6 million in the United States - this sentence drags on and platinum implies its sold 6 million, link to RIAA certification
  • try beef up the Anywhere but Home section with chart positions and reviews (album sections could do with reviews)
  • Lineup changes - each paragraph starts with "On DATE... try mix-it up a bit
  • You refer to members with their second name after the first mention, currently it changes from Amy Lee, to Lee
  • References in other media is a trivia section
  • You will need a style section if you want FA, describe the band's sound, quotes from critics, use of piano and organs, how the band's sound changed from Fallen to Open Door etc
  • Change the Grammy Award color for 2008 to #ffffcc as done here

Other than that it looks pretty good, good work M3tal H3ad (talk) 05:18, 28 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

  • "The songs were edited by both artists, and they shared equal credit." I would cite that.
  • "References in other media" is listy.
  • I would like more analysis of their music, style etc.

IMO it is a GA but not yet up to FA status. To achive that it will need more profound analysis.--Yannismarou (talk) 18:47, 31 December 2007 (UTC)