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[edit] Dan Gibbs

Dan Gibbs, on a newly-minted state senator, is the latest in my attempts towards building good articles on Colorado legislators. I'm still working on obtaining images, but I'd appreciate more feedback than the single automated response I got for my peer review request of John Kefalas last month. -- Sethant (talk) 01:07, 20 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

  • "born c. 1976". Why c.? We do not know exact date?
    • That's correct; there doesn't appear to be a published source with his actual birthdate; I've had to extrapolate it based on his age given in various articles. -- Sethant (talk) 18:39, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
  • A picture would be nice for the article, but I know it is tough to find one because of copyright issues.
    • I've requested one several times, but haven't yet gotten a response. -- Sethant (talk) 18:39, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
  • "A native of Gunnison, Colorado, Gibbs' parents were both public school teachers and later school principals." I am not sure since I am not a native English speaker but is it "a native" or "natives of" correct? You are referring to the parents, aren't you?
    • Actually, I was referring to Gibbs. Rephrased. -- Sethant (talk) 18:39, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
  • "however, he defeated Republican Ken Chlouber by a 2:1 margin[9] to represent House District 56, encompassing Eagle, Lake and Summit Counties, including the skiing communities of Vail and Breckenridge.[9]" You do you mention twice in the same sentence the same citation. Once is ok!
  • "He now represents represent." I don't think it is necessary to link "now" here.
    • Fixed, as well as the duplicated word. -- Sethant (talk) 18:39, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
  • Check WP:REF so as not to repeat the same citation. What I mean. E.g. references 21-25 are actually the same. They should be presented as the same citation. There is no reason to repeat them in different numbers. Just read here (Naming a ref tag so it can be used more than once) and you will understand what I mean.--Yannismarou (talk) 18:58, 31 December 2007 (UTC)
    • Actually, references 21 through 25 are all different news articles. They may have looked the same because they were all written by the same article, but, you'll notice, the links, titles, and dates are all different. Thanks for all your comments! -- Sethant (talk) 18:39, 1 January 2008 (UTC)
      • Oups! You are right! My mistake!--Yannismarou (talk) 13:42, 2 January 2008 (UTC)