Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Cap Anson
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[edit] Cap Anson
Myself and Fabrictramp (collectively operating as "TC&FCNSCFIBBA‎") are making an effort to bring this article to GA/FA status. We want a neutral third party to evaluate how far we've come and what needs to be done prior to submitting it as a GAC/FAC. Caknuck (talk) 02:11, 26 February 2008 (UTC)
- Please consider adding
{{persondata|PLEASE SEE [[WP:PDATA]]!}}along with the required parameters to the article - see Wikipedia:Persondata for more information.[?] DrKiernan (talk) 11:57, 26 February 2008 (UTC)
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Done--Fabrictramp (talk) 14:54, 26 February 2008 (UTC)
[edit] Yannismarou
- "Early life" is short. Not easy I suppose to find more data about this period and his parents.
- "He is one of only a few players to score six runs in a game, a feat accomplished on August 24, 1886." Maybe you could cite that.
- In "Albert Spalding and James Hart" I get the impression that the prose is not as good as it was in the previous paragraphs. I see some stubby paragraphs and samples of choppy prose ("Anson first met Albert Spalding while both were players; Spalding was a pitcher for the Rockford Forest Citys, Anson played for the Marshalltown, Iowa team.[8] Spalding convinced the 18-year-old Anson to come play for the Forest Citys at a salary of $65 per month.")
- "In 1907, Anson made another attempt to come back to baseball, acquiring a semi-pro team in the Chicago City League, which he would call "Anson's Colts".[6][3] Anson initially had no intention of playing for the team, but in June 1907, at the age of 55, Anson started playing some games at first base in an attempt to boost poor attendance." "Anson was named vice-president of the American Bowling Congress in 1903, and led a team to the five-man national championship in 1904.[2] Anson was forced to sell the billiards hall in 1909 when faced with mounting financial problems that led to his bankruptcy.[18] Anson was also an avid golfer." Again not the best prose IMO: repetitive a choppy. Maybe an overall copy-editing would help.
- Why citation 6 has no pages, although it is a printed source?
- I think the "See also" section is too long. Do we really need all these links, and couldn't some of them be incorporated in the text.--Yannismarou (talk) 15:35, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
