Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Andrew Orlowski

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[edit] Andrew Orlowski

How much about Wikipedia should remain in this article? He makes it a focus of his works, but self-referencing is quite pointless. -- Zanimum 17:17, 9 January 2007 (UTC)

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  • Thanks for this review. -- Zanimum 15:38, 10 January 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Yannismarou

A critic of Wikipedia ! This is my review:

• The lead is too short. Check LEAD.
• I see a ^{[citation needed]}. Fix it.
• Nothing about his life? Early years? Personal life? Stydies? You go straight to "Early career" and 1992. What about 1966-1992?
• "Early career" is stubby. I suggest you expand.
• I see some stubby one-sentence paragraphs. Merge or expand them.
• "The Register" is full of scattered info, not well-connected with one another, and, subsequently, the prose flow is bad. All this info may be useful, but you should put it in an order.
• Not all your online references use Template:cite news.
• The article on Wikipedia is not long. Especially if the rest of the article gets expanded.
• Trim the "see also" section. After my edit, it has just one link. It would be incorporated somewhere in the main article.--Yannismarou 20:13, 11 January 2007 (UTC)

What happens when a person keeps their pre-career life private? -- Zanimum 19:06, 12 January 2007 (UTC)

Then, our cabability of improving the article is limited.--Yannismarou 10:39, 14 January 2007 (UTC)