User talk:Watch The Sky

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Contents 1 Notability of Paratus Worldwide Protection 2 Grammar Edits 3 Vivendi 4 Paratus Worldwide

[edit] Notability of Paratus Worldwide Protection

A tag has been placed on Paratus Worldwide Protection requesting that it be speedily deleted from Wikipedia. This has been done because the article appears to be about a person, group of people, band, club, company, or web content, but it does not indicate how or why the subject is notable: that is, why an article about that subject should be included in an encyclopedia. Under the criteria for speedy deletion, articles that do not assert the subject's importance or significance may be deleted at any time. Please see the guidelines for what is generally accepted as notable.

If you think that you can assert the notability of the subject, you may contest the deletion by adding {{hangon}} to the top of the page (just below the existing speedy deletion or "db" tag), coupled with adding a note on the article's talk page explaining your position, but be aware that once tagged for speedy deletion, if the article meets the criterion it may be deleted without delay. Please do not remove the speedy deletion tag yourself, but don't hesitate to add information to the article that would confirm the subject's notability under Wikipedia guidelines.

For guidelines on specific types of articles, you may want to check out our criteria for biographies, for web sites, for bands, or for companies. Feel free to leave a note on my talk page if you have any questions about this. Yourname 00:21, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Grammar Edits

Most of your grammar edits are good. A couple of them increase the wordiness of certain sentence, for instance, "anywhere between," on the Ninja in popular culture page, and "...the mind has is the ability to..." phrasing on the Stereotype inevitability page. Mcwabaunsee 22:15, 13 November 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Vivendi

What are these losses attributed to? Why is Vivendi under such intense media scrutiny?

Your section doesn't say anything of politics. Who or what is Vivendi associated with financially? Who do they support? Mcwabaunsee 22:15, 13 November 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Paratus Worldwide

"...other security forms..." "firms"?

This section is too thin. What about the necessary sections that any corporate encyclopedia entry should have--something about the environmental record, about profits, about political affiliations? Mcwabaunsee 22:15, 13 November 2007 (UTC)