Talk:University of the Philippines ROTC Unit
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[edit] WPMILHIST Assessment
Long and thorough, but needs a little work. I don't think it's quite clear enough from the introduction paragraph that this is a native Filipino military group and not somehow a branch of the US military - Douglas MacArthur was American, and ROTC is an American term (certainly not a Spanish or Filipino one), so I think it can be confusing, particularly for American readers. Also, there are elements which do not read encyclopedically, and sound as if they were written by a member of the unit, taken from the unit's webpage or something like that. In particular, "Duty well performed, Honor untarnished, and Country above-self has been the shibboleth and clarion call of the UP Vanguard since its inception 78 years ago" sounds like an overly embellished self-proud sort of way of describing the unit's history - not very objective or encyclopedic. A great start, just needs some work. Thanks. @LordAmeth 09:39, 27 February 2007 (UTC)