Talk:Toyota War
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The article Technical (fighting vehicle) seems related, but I couldn't find a decent place to link to it. Recury 18:13, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
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[edit] GA on hold
I have assessed the article according to the GA criteria. Please fix the following suggestions and I'll pass the article:
- Inline citations go directly after the punctuation, be sure to fix them all.
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- Done. - Francis Tyers · 08:49, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
- Add wikilinks for: ceasefire (intro), mine fields (Libyan expulsion),
- Done. - Francis Tyers · 08:51, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
- Consider rewording "Behind this appearance of strength, weaknesses manifested themselves."
- "Against these, Hassan Djamous, the thirty-year-old head of the FANT, commanded 4,000–5,000 troops." Don't use "Against these", elaborate more. Also add an inline citation for the statement.
- "The unexpected defeat stunned Gaddafi; he reacted on January 4 by recalling to service all the army reservists and, in an act of defiance, bombing civilians in Arada, south of the 16th parallel, an action to which France answered with a second airstrike on Ouadi Doum in February 1986, destroying the radar system, which blinded the Libyan Air Force in Chad for months." That's one long sentence! Try splitting it into two and rewording.
- "Observers estimated that, in the Chadian victories in the first three months of 1987, more than 3,000 Libyan soldiers had been killed or captured or had deserted." Change the last part of the sentence to "had been killed, captured, or had deserted".
- In the third paragraph of the Libyan expulsion section, mine fields is spelled two different ways (one with a space, one without); choose the right one.
- "In an attempt to save his prestige," Don't use this phrasing, it may be construed as POV. Same for "Anxious to highlight the victory, Gaddafi flew foreign journalists to the region, so they could report his success."
- Wikilink full dates such as September 5, 1987.
- I can't seem to see any that aren't linked. Is this still a problem? - Francis Tyers · 08:54, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
Add inline citations for:
- The Toyota War attracted considerable interest in the United States, where the possibility of using Habré to overthrow Gaddafi was given serious consideration.
- It was assumed that war would, sooner of later, resume.
Altogether, a broad article with excellent use of images with just some minor formatting issues. Fix the above suggestions and add the inline citations within seven days and I'll pass the article. Good work so far, and when you're done or if you have any questions, please let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. --Nehrams2020 07:49, 20 March 2007 (UTC)
- Should be all done now.--Aldux 18:03, 22 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] A few more things
- "Hassan Djamous, the thirty-year-old FANT commander-in-chief, pitched against the Libyan garison 4,000–5,000 troops." Garison is misspelled (garrison), and add "of" right after it.
- Done.--Aldux 16:36, 23 March 2007 (UTC)
- "The unexpected defeat stunned Gaddafi, that reacted on January 4 by recalling to service all the army reservists. In an act of defiance towards France he also ordered the bombing of Arada, well south of the 16th parallel; France answered with a new airstrike on Ouadi Doum, destroying their radar system, thus effectively blinding the Libyan Air Force in Chad for months." This still needs to be reworded better. Perhaps: "The unexpected defeat stunned Gaddafi, who then reacted on January 4 by recalling to service all of the army reservists. In an act of defiance towards France, he also ordered the bombing of Arada, well south of the 16th parallel. France retaliated with a new airstrike on Ouadi Doum and destroyed their radar system, effectively blinding the Libyan Air Force in Chad for several months."
- Done.--Aldux 16:36, 23 March 2007 (UTC)
- September 5, 1987 in the Renewed Chadian offensive section is the one I noticed that should be wikilinked.
- Isn't it linked? Hope it's OK now.--Aldux 16:36, 23 March 2007 (UTC)
- The inline citation still needs to be moved in "Instead, while there were minor violations of the ceasefire" (Ceasefire section)
- I'm not sure I've understood exactly what you mean here. Anyways, I've rewritten it. The inline citation is there, number 25.--Aldux 16:36, 23 March 2007 (UTC)
There are a few things that were not fully completed, so fix the above and again let me know when you're done and I'll pass it. Good work so far. --Nehrams2020 23:36, 22 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] GA passed
I have passed this article according to the GA criteria. You have addressed all of the above suggestions, but please continue to look over the article and determine how the article can continue to be expanded with sourced information. Keep up the good work and consider a peer review and then taking it to FAC. If you have the time, please review an article or two at GAC to help eliminate the backlog. --Nehrams2020 23:22, 24 March 2007 (UTC)
- That's great. Congrats Aldux. Picaroon 23:35, 24 March 2007 (UTC)
- Thanks Picaroon for all your help. Without BT, Fran and your's help this article would never had done it!--Aldux 16:08, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] problem with statistics
It says that Libya "lost one tenth of its army, with 7,500 troops killed and 1.5 billion dollars worth of military equipment destroyed or captured.[5]" which means Libya has a 75,000 army, yet it's strength is put at 90,000. Umm, how can that be, exactly? MB
- It's Simons that writes "lost one tenth of its army". This may apparently seem contradictory with 90,000, but if you add the PoW (at least 1,000) you're not far from the 90,000 spoken of by the LOC country study.--Aldux 14:02, 13 May 2007 (UTC)
[edit] In re: Toyotas: some hearsay
Living in Japan for a year (1990) and reading The Japan Times regularly, I became aware that lots of used cars in Japan are moved by ship to Africa; I suppose there are specific companies working in this industry, and a particular name for this ongoing trade. I don't know more than this. --McTrixie/Mr Accountable 02:43, 30 May 2007 (UTC)
[edit] GA Sweeps Review: Pass
As part of the WikiProject Good Articles, we're doing sweeps to go over all of the current GAs and see if they still meet the GA criteria. I'm specifically going over all of the "Conflicts, battles and military exercises" articles. It looks like I already passed this article in the past, so this review didn't take too long since I'm familiar with the article. I believe the article currently meets the criteria and should remain listed as a Good article. Keep improving the article, and see if there are any other relevant categories and sources you can include. You should also consider taking this to WP:FAC eventually after having a peer review and copyedit from a few outside editors. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. I have edited the article history to reflect this review. Regards, Nehrams2020 20:15, 10 September 2007 (UTC)