Talk:Thirsty Merc

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January 28, 2008 Good article nominee Listed

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[edit] GA nom on hold

• No picture?
  • Nope. Nothing on Flickr, etc. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• In the lead could you change it to Rai Thistlethwayte (vocals) etc.?
  • Done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• Do you need the Main article: things on the sections?
  • Removed. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• There are a few red wlinks in the article that shouldn't be there
  • Such as? I see two - one a notable song, the other a possibly notable band (will need to look further). Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
    • Sorry, I don't quite know the rules on red links, I just think they look bad. —Burningclean _{[Speak the truth!]} 21:58, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• "The EP had been recorded without a label; the band were contacted by Warner Music after a live performance." → "The EP had been recorded without a label, however the band were contacted by Warner Music after watching the band perform live."
  • Done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• "which Thistlethwayte described as highly satisfying" → "which Thistlethwayte described as "highly satisfying""
  • It's not a quote, so not done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
    • Wouldn't that be POV then? —Burningclean _{[Speak the truth!]} 21:58, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• "In producing Slideshows, Thirsty Merc" → "While producing Slideshows, Thirsty Merc"
  • Done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• The members section is in bad shape. The sections should be "Current members" and "Former members". and as opposed to the current format it should be:
  Rai Thistlethwayte: guitar, piano, singer–songwriter (2002–present)
  • Done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)
• "Official website" in the external links doesn't need to be bolded
  • Done. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)

Leave a note on my talk page when it is done. —Burningclean _{[Speak the truth!]} 03:29, 28 January 2008 (UTC)

Comment: The paragraphing is very short. --BritandBeyonce (talk) 03:38, 28 January 2008 (UTC)

Mainly due to there not being much content on the band, unfortuneately. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 07:21, 28 January 2008 (UTC)

Passed. —Burningclean _{[Speak the truth!]} 21:58, 28 January 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Furthermore

Sorry if this is late. I know you DM knew why. =)

• Use en dash in Years active field.
• Confusing… The infobox says they originated from Dubbo then why Sydney in the lead?
• Remove currently. As consists itself, it means present.
• Use colon instead of semi colon.
• Do you prefer band to be paired with a plural verb?
  • Yep.
• Described what Evermore is. Are they American Australian, rock band or any.
• Thirsty Merc was formed…
• Initially, they performed
• The pair was joined...
• Some success? Be specific.
• Pipe link R&B.
  • No difference...
• Who's Thistlethwayte?
  • Lead singer, noted at start of section.
• Early work? Early is fine but work is not the broad; it might overlook details of the section.
• Some radio airplay… Be particular.
• Stack said in 2004 "we knew… This needs punctuation if you do not want to add that.
• and launched the band…
• I think also needs to be removed…
• De-link singles; already been linked on the preceding section.
• Again, change semi colon to colon.
• All charted in Australia…
• with "Someday, Someday" reaching #19, while only "In the Summartime" charted in New Zealand, where it peaked higher (#12) than in Australia (#43). What? Do not use parenthesis; it pauses the flow of the prose.
• Remove "also" in "was also nominated".
• Excellent producer is POV.
  • Sourced, quoted.
• He also? Who's he? And why use also? No statement was given preceding this sentence.
• Put the producer thing in the first paragraph. The flow is inverted.
• interview to interview
  • Huh?
    • I think I spoted this a wrong spelling. Anyway, If I was mistaken, ignore this. --BritandBeyonce (talk) 09:55, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
• Change semi colon to comma.
• Some success again...
• Avoid contracted words. Change didn't to did not.
• Remove also and any similar word with noted?
  • I am a big fan of that word....:)
    • But succesive use of it is not good. --BritandBeyonce (talk) 09:55, 29 January 2008 (UTC)
• Remove extensively and comma.
  • Why? 35 shows in Australia is extensive
• Who's The Electric Confectionaries?
• Use en dash for the Members section and its long. Kindly shorten; I mean, reformat.
  • Not sure how to shorten it...
• Remove the color thing in the table.
• Un-bold names of the member, albums and the ARIA Awards.
  • Album names and member names are generally bolded, but I unbolded the ARIA stuff.

If objections have been addressed before, please crash it out. Feel free to object. --BritandBeyonce (talk) 01:59, 29 January 2008 (UTC)

Thanks heaps. I replied to stuff that wasn't done, so the rest is. Dihydrogen Monoxide (party) 09:35, 29 January 2008 (UTC)

Always welcome. --BritandBeyonce (talk) 09:55, 29 January 2008 (UTC)