Talk:Scottish Reformation/Comments

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I must repeat Thanatosimiis comments:

1) The prose is not "compelling" as we say in GA circles. The lead needs to be bigger, the paragraphs shouldn't be so short, and there are problems that could use a good copyedit. Additionally, there are a few too many quotes. A few might be useful, but it feels like a bunch of quotes sewn together in places. There are also a few too many places where all the contradictions spin readers heads around confused, like "However, Parliament's declarations had been mainly negative in 1560, the was no question of any Act of Uniformity as in England. Thus, the shape the Church initially took was dependent on local Protestant patrons. However, even before 1560, reformed congregations had already been organising themselves under the influence of Knox."

2) The article needs to be broad in coverage. I can't say that it is or isn't, but the article doesn't read as itself. You need an outline, somthing like, "Pre-reformation church, early reformation influences, reformation crises themselves, post-reformation". Cover those and it'll be broad in coverage.

Other than this, it's fine, but it needs some substantial edits before it is GA quality, so I'm failing this this time. Make sure the article reads comprehensivly, get a few copyeditors, and then renominate. Blood red sandman 17:21, 28 December 2006 (UTC)