Wikipedia:Scientific peer review/Styracosaurus

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[edit] Styracosaurus

I've recently worked to expand this article, and would now like feedback. Comments about accuracy, depth, WP:MOS observations, prose, etc, are more than welcome. Firsfron of Ronchester 04:27, 16 April 2007 (UTC)

I have also added this to Wikipedia:Peer review, but any discussion will also occur here. --Bduke 06:29, 16 April 2007 (UTC)

Thank you, Bduke. Firsfron of Ronchester 06:37, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
My comments are at Talk:Styracosaurus/Comments. Cheers! Circeus 14:34, 20 April 2007 (UTC)

A few things:

  • Why does the lead say the dino has 4 to 6 horns when the one in the picture has 7 or 8?
  • There are too many weasel words, especially in Horns and Frill:
  • has been the subject of debate between whom?
  • it was long believed by whom?
  • In popular culture has no citations, and seems a little too short and listy to even be included.

Not a bad start, though. Keep at it! --Cryptic C62 · Talk 01:28, 23 April 2007 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your comments, Cryptic. There were two or three major spikes on each side of the frill, with smaller hornlets and hooks along the lower parts of the frill. There also individual variation. I'll try to make it clearer in the text. The weasel wording obviously will have to be adjusted. I will also try to expand the pop culture section, with references, to make it less listy and possibly worthwhile. Thanks for your time. Firsfron of Ronchester 02:54, 23 April 2007 (UTC)
  • I'm a bit concerned about this phrase: "Though often depicted in popular culture as herding animals" It comes close to being a weasel phrase. However, I don't really think there's a better way to state it, so see if you can find something in your sources that specifically backs up that sentence.
  • Hooray for references in Popular culture! Try to make sure that section maintains an encyclopedic tone. The first few sentences are a bit odd. --Cryptic C62 · Talk 02:17, 27 April 2007 (UTC)
Thanks very much for your second look, Cryptic. Some sections have been altered to remove weasel-speak and replace them with a more encyclopedic tone. Firsfron of Ronchester 03:53, 5 May 2007 (UTC)
Thanks for the automated review, Ruhr! I fixed everything I could find, using an automatic search tool. Best wishes, Firsfron of Ronchester 03:53, 5 May 2007 (UTC)
You are very welcome - keep up the good work! Ruhrfisch 13:34, 5 May 2007 (UTC)