Talk:Ross Sea party

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[edit] Shorten article?

I think this article is a bit too long and gives too much detail. After all, Wikipedia is meant to be an encyclopedia, and should state the important facts about a given topic, but not necessarily all facts available.

Passages like “Wild, who had nursed the very weak Padre and Mack but had only some tea and Bovril cubes and 2 biscuits for food during that time. Seeing the others returning, Wild came out of the lonely tent and put on his harness to come help pull the sledge, an act that brought tears to Richards' eyes. Mackintosh was unable to stand up straight but crawled out to thank Joyce's party for saving their lives.” seem a bit out of place here, as well as the style of writing used, which I think is appropriate for a book about the expedition but not for an encyclopedia article.

Nebogipfel 13:55, 18 January 2007 (UTC)

This comment relates to a superseded version of the article Brianboulton (talk) 14:47, 19 February 2008 (UTC)

[edit] Article edited

The concerns above haven't been addressed in 10 months so I've decided to do it. The story-telling stuff, which is available in many expedition books, is being largely eliminated and important factual information added, also references & footnotes. The finished product may not be much shorter but should much more resemble an encyclopedia article. I don't like hacking someone's work about, but there has been plenty of time for the writer to respond, & he/she has not done so.

Brianboulton 00:50, 24th November 2007

Revision completed Brianboulton (talk) 00:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Featured Article from 13 February 2008 Brianboulton (talk) 14:46, 19 February 2008 (UTC)