User talk:Robin Clement
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[edit] Image tagging for Image:Drew Carey 1.jpg
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[edit] Image tagging for Image:Weezer_Photo.jpg
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[edit] Comments from Joe
Nice work so far, Robin.
Good move to take your own photo.
The celebrities section is great. You should, however, say an equal amount about each of them, and make sentence a complete sentence. I love the one-sentence anecdote about Goldwater.
In general you need to clean up some sentences to improve clarity of meaning:
In this one below, the phrase "there was" is quite vague--when did this happen? What kind of 1960s trends? Also, the wording is flabby; you could say something like: "In <date> many <kind of> 1960s trends reemerged."
WHen you say "With this" the word "this" is unclear also.
Also, why does this have a bullet? Is it meant to be parallel to the other items?
- ยท There was a reemergence of 1960s trends. With this, Mike Myers played Austin Powers, who wore them in the Austin Powers series of films.
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[edit] Various other remarks
(1) Look for spelling, grammar, and other sentence style problems.
- "Horn-rimmed glasses were coined their name..."
The word "coined" means "invented" (as in minting a coin). You should say something like "The name horn-rimmed glasses was coined to refer to ...."
(2) Time -- sometimes you are fairly precise about time (at least w/in a decade). In other places you are vague. Try to avoid vague references to periods in history when you can be more exact.
(3) The opening sentence should not be so timid. Write a formal sentence definition that says what horn-rimmed glasses are. Be bold. State facts. Avoid hedging. I think you need to take a position on the word origin, and mention the alternative word origin (pointy horns) just as a thing people think == not as contest of ideas.
(4) I thought John Lennon was known for wire-frame glasses.
--Joegrohens 21:47, 14 November 2006 (UTC)
[edit] Categories.
I removed the category tags from your user page. User pages are not permitted to appear in the main category namespace.--Srleffler 20:23, 11 February 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Drew.jpg
You do realize that Image:Drew.jpg on this subpage is NOT a picture of Drew Carey? --Calton | Talk 00:01, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
