Talk:River Biss

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 River Biss was a good article nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these are addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.

Reviewed version: November 12, 2007

[edit] Failed GA

Although GA allows for short articles on obscure articles, this one really is pushing it too far IMHO. I did a word count and the text prose size is about 1750 characters. In this case, if it is so short and obscure, merging is probably the best option. but now that I am here, I might as well comment on what needs to be fixed

  • OR - ref 3 is OR. You have noted yourself that such an etymology is common. However, your ref simply does so by telling the reader to look at the pattern in other cities. That is OR
  • Fixed
  • Referencing - the inlines needs to be immediately after the punctuation - WP:MOS - Ref3 is correct, but the others are not (they are before the punct)
  • Fixed
  • "It then flows through the Town Park, where a small constituent lake is haunt to wildfowl, before passing behind shops and industrial buildings in a Riverside Walk; this is largely an overgrown tarmac path for which improvements have been suggested[6], and in November 2007, the District Council announced a study into implementing those improvements" - long sentence needs to be broken
  • Fixed
  • There is a general lack of commas which should be used. "The river enters the centre of Trowbridge through the Biss Meadows Country Park, where local wildlife can be seen" and "Before leaving the centre of Trowbridge, the Biss flows under the Town Bridge in roughly the location of the original river crossing which gives the town its name;" among others. I bolded where the commas need to be
  • Fixed
  • "It is crossed by" -> "it is intersected by"
  • Unchanged as "intersected" implies that they meet; the rover crosses the canal via an aqueduct, see Kennet and Avon Canal
  • WP:REF - the inline cites need to be filled out properly with author/dates/publisher and so forth. see {{cite web}} or a GA example like Irfan Pathan for an example.
  • Fixed

Thanks, Blnguyen (bananabucket) 04:25, 12 November 2007 (UTC)