User:Rehevkor/Sandbox

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[edit] GA Review

Overall a decent article, but a few major issues and a few lesser ones forced me to fail its GA nomination, as detailed below:

  • The biggest problem with the article are the sources of information. Nearly every one of them fails WP:V, WP:RS, etc. In fact, there's only about 3-4 of the citations that are reliable, the main problem being that most sources are from the band itself.
  • Image:Machinae Supremacy logo.jpg is missing a Fair Use rationale altogether.
  • The page for the first audio samples needs to be reworked. Since it was distributed freely, I don't think fair-use applies. So replace the Fair-use rationale/tag with something more appropriate.
  • "but it was only a few months later the band found the path they wanted to follow." What the heck does that mean?
Y Done Rehevkor (talk) 17:31, 18 November 2007 (UTC)
  • Citations should come immediately after punctuation without a space. This.[1] Not this. [2]
  • Numbers below 10 should be spelled out. "Nine" not "9."
  • "Despite being the band's first songs, the recordings were high quality and helped the band prove themselves to their early fans." Is an opinion. This sentence should be taken out completely.
Y Done Rehevkor (talk) 17:31, 18 November 2007 (UTC)
  • "Great Giana Sisters" should be italicized when referring to the original videogame (same with "Jets'n'Guns"), and in quotations when referring to the song. Loot Burn Rape Kill Repeat and Multiball are both songs right? So they should be in quotes rather than italicized. The same rules apply to "Metallica's's One during a Guitar Hero segment."
  • "The album was very well received by fans and the first print of 1000 copies sold out quickly" is POV and should ideally be removed or at least cited.
  • Same with "That did not mean Machinae Supremacy were not busy"
Y Done Rehevkor (talk) 17:31, 18 November 2007 (UTC)
  • "and was very well received." is opinion and should be removed.
Y Done Rehevkor (talk) 17:31, 18 November 2007 (UTC)

Overall, my main concern is with the sources of information. If the band's official website is the only source for information about the band, I would predict that it will be impossible to write a GA article for the band. If 3rd party information does exist, I would highly recommend replacing the current sources with those. If you have any questions or concerns regarding the article or my review, feel free to drop my a line on my Talk Page. Drewcifer (talk) 10:11, 18 November 2007 (UTC)