Talk:Reality-based self-defense
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Very good, an excellent article on what RBSD is all about!!! —Preceding unsigned comment added by 86.143.198.231 (talk • contribs) 22:54, 2 August 2006
I think its getting there, I'm working on the clarity of language in a couple of parts - specifically around various motor skills. I have forwarded to a few people I think can help with the more kinesthological portions. Clausewitz01 02:35, 17 August 2006 (UTC)
This page needs to be more "Vendor Neutral." At the moment the majority of the article appears to be an add for RMAX. Although I am a fan of Sonnon, I believe certain terms should remain neutral. If you wish I can help edit the page. I can jelp with a better definition of Gross Motor as well as add other relevant content. Sincerely Chris --Cwheeler33 18:03, 26 September 2007 (UTC)
- I agree with that. I don't know anything about RBSD in itself, but the article isn't really all that neutral at the moment - the last para is a case in point. More to the point, it's sorely lacking in inline references - having the *only* inline citations being from Sonnon's work isn't really acceptable. There are also too many external links: WP guidelines are that discussion forums should *not* usually be used as links, and a few of the other links are more adverts than informative. We're not a link farm.
- You also have things like "Unlike fine and complex motor skills, gross motor skills DO NOT deteriorate under stress." That can't just be left as an assertion; it *needs* a proper citation from a reliable source (ie not someone with a vested interest for/against RBSD). I nearly shoved a POV template on the article, but decided it wasn't that bad. As it stands, the article has plenty of potential, but needs cleaning up in general and more references in particular. 86.132.138.205 01:23, 5 October 2007 (UTC)