Talk:Preuss School
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[edit] nice comment
nice comment Rewster Victuallers 14:10, 25 March 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Are you a Preuss School student?
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[edit] GA review
5. Stability Some persistent vandalism occured around 1 month ago, but this shouldn't be a problem.
This article passes GA review. OhanaUnited 14:04, 1 June 2007 (UTC)
[edit] GA comment
The first image needs a fair use rationale for the article to keep its current status. Look to similar passed GA/FAs for examples of what to include in the detailed rationale. --Nehrams2020 05:43, 3 June 2007 (UTC)
- Done OhanaUnited 13:02, 3 June 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Copyedit
[edit] Lots of WP:MOS attention needed
I left sample edits only, along with some inline queries; please read my edit summaries and check each edit, as they are samples of MOS work needed throughout. Also, citations are incomplete and often incorrect. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 03:46, 27 November 2007 (UTC)
- That's a large body of work to be done, but thanks a lot for going through. I will try and get to them, but it will likely have to wait until this weekend. This really is the sort of thing I needed though, I should be able to follow the samples from here. Thanks and cheers. SorryGuy 07:07, 27 November 2007 (UTC)
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- I saw your note to Tony1 (don't ask me how I got there), and I wanted to apologize on behalf of the League of Copy-Editors for the lack of response. The League currently lists some 260+ members, but only a literal handful (single digits) are active now or at any other given time. With a 2600+ backlog -- well, you can see the problem. It looks like SandyGeorgia has given you good advice. When you have completed all of those suggested fixes, leave me a message on my talk page, and I'll try to do the copy-edit. Perhaps I can help you get this to FA as I did for Florida Atlantic University. Regards, Unimaginative Username (talk) 02:23, 28 November 2007 (UTC)
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- Alright, thanks, I really appreciate the offer. As I told SandyGeorgia, I hope to be able to get to those fixes this weekend. I'll make sure I let you know, though. SorryGuy 03:50, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
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[edit] Spell out abbreviations on first appearance
"The study did, however, find that the number of A-G courses and AP classes..." What do A-G and AP mean? Please see Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Acronyms_and_abbreviations. Regards from the LoCE, Unimaginative Username (talk) 02:26, 29 November 2007 (UTC),
- I plunged in without reading the Talk page or looking at the page history. I, too, was stopped by A-G and AP. It appears that A-G is a California designation for college prep courses. I could not find any explanation of where the "A" and the "G" came from or what they might stand for. Finetooth (talk) 00:42, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
- Yes, A-G are the courses that the UC asks for on applications. I also really have no idea what they stand for except that there are seven categories of necessary classes and that A-G is seven letters. SorryGuy 03:46, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
- Then, without my knowing the facts, I would suggest spelling that out for the reader: "The number of students taking the seven college preparatory courses (referred to as "courses A through G") required for admission to the University of California..." etc. Conciseness is a goal, but for items not likely to be understood by the average reader, explanations are in order (concise explanations, of course). Regards, Unimaginative Username (talk) 05:40, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
p. s. It might, or might not, be relevant to the article for you to research what these courses are and to list them. Unimaginative Username (talk) 05:41, 30 November 2007 (UTC)- Here are two more that need to be spelled out in the Clubs section: M.E.D. Club and SWAP. Finetooth (talk) 00:27, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Airband also needs to be explained if it is to be included. It was wikilinked to an article on the radio spectrum used in aviation, which did not seem to me to fit with the idea of an Airband talent show. I deleted Airband and left in the talent show, but you might want to restore it. Finetooth (talk) 00:44, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Here are two more that need to be spelled out in the Clubs section: M.E.D. Club and SWAP. Finetooth (talk) 00:27, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Then, without my knowing the facts, I would suggest spelling that out for the reader: "The number of students taking the seven college preparatory courses (referred to as "courses A through G") required for admission to the University of California..." etc. Conciseness is a goal, but for items not likely to be understood by the average reader, explanations are in order (concise explanations, of course). Regards, Unimaginative Username (talk) 05:40, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
- Yes, A-G are the courses that the UC asks for on applications. I also really have no idea what they stand for except that there are seven categories of necessary classes and that A-G is seven letters. SorryGuy 03:46, 30 November 2007 (UTC)
[edit] Missing citation data
Many of the citations to newspapers are missing the publication date, and each one needs to be tracked down and added. This is a tedious job, and I'm going to hand it back to the main author(s) of the article. The "cite news" template is fine to use, but the newspaper or journal's name should go in the "publisher" space, and the "date" space and pipe symbol that you can generate by holding down the Shift key and pressing the backslash key on your keyboard to produce | can be inserted right after the publisher space. You can find the "cite news" template at WP:CIT in case you need to refer to it. I added the missing publication date to citation 32, which you can look at as a model as well. The publication date, as you insert it, should be autoformatted with the usual pair of square brackets. Finetooth (talk) 01:25, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- I think it was only three that needed them and I went ahead and added them. I also converted the work references to publisher references. Do the publishers now need to be italicized? SorryGuy Talk 03:45, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, the names of newspapers and journals should appear in italics but should not be wikilinked in the citations. Thanks for fixing SWAP and the other naked acronyms. Meanwhile, I just re-wrote the paragraph about the controversy created by the CREATE report. The "boutique" charge didn't make sense to me until I checked the source and saw that the "reject" group consisted of those 150 kids who lost the lottery, not the much larger group that didn't qualify for other reasons. Thus, it was possible for people to say that Preuss was attracting highly-motivated kids, half of whom did well at Preuss and half of whom did equally well in mainstream schools. After understanding that, I could see how the number of AP courses mattered; even though the lottery losers had equally high test scores, they lost the opportunity offered by Preuss to get a leg up on the college courses. The headline writer for the cited newspaper article goofed. All the subtlety in the story was distorted in the headline, which was misleading. Finetooth (talk) 04:33, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yeah, that wording is probably better. I think we may have had an edit conflict of sorts, am I correct in assuming you did not mean to revert the corrections from work->publisher and the date additions? SorryGuy Talk 04:49, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, I didn't revert them on purpose. I have another question, though. I'm carefully reading the news stories about the second controversy because living people are involved. Caution here is in order. Everything in the article looks accurate and fair to me except for one thing that I can't verify. The claim that the "school changed between 65 and 100 failing grades to passing grades" doesn't seem to be supported by the cited story. I'm getting a bit weary, and it's certainly possible that it's there and that I'm just not seeing it. Would you please double-check and see if it's there and let me know. If it's not there, we can't use it unless you can find another reliable source. Finetooth (talk) 05:22, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Alright, I will reinsert them then. I also see the BLP issues you did which is the reasoning behind rpetty much every sentence being referenced in that section. I can not find the original citation for the 65, although I think it was on the NBC San Diego website, it may be gone now as I can not find it. The article cited right after the article says 100, though, so I am just going to change it to that. SorryGuy Talk 05:36, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, I didn't revert them on purpose. I have another question, though. I'm carefully reading the news stories about the second controversy because living people are involved. Caution here is in order. Everything in the article looks accurate and fair to me except for one thing that I can't verify. The claim that the "school changed between 65 and 100 failing grades to passing grades" doesn't seem to be supported by the cited story. I'm getting a bit weary, and it's certainly possible that it's there and that I'm just not seeing it. Would you please double-check and see if it's there and let me know. If it's not there, we can't use it unless you can find another reliable source. Finetooth (talk) 05:22, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yeah, that wording is probably better. I think we may have had an edit conflict of sorts, am I correct in assuming you did not mean to revert the corrections from work->publisher and the date additions? SorryGuy Talk 04:49, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Yes, the names of newspapers and journals should appear in italics but should not be wikilinked in the citations. Thanks for fixing SWAP and the other naked acronyms. Meanwhile, I just re-wrote the paragraph about the controversy created by the CREATE report. The "boutique" charge didn't make sense to me until I checked the source and saw that the "reject" group consisted of those 150 kids who lost the lottery, not the much larger group that didn't qualify for other reasons. Thus, it was possible for people to say that Preuss was attracting highly-motivated kids, half of whom did well at Preuss and half of whom did equally well in mainstream schools. After understanding that, I could see how the number of AP courses mattered; even though the lottery losers had equally high test scores, they lost the opportunity offered by Preuss to get a leg up on the college courses. The headline writer for the cited newspaper article goofed. All the subtlety in the story was distorted in the headline, which was misleading. Finetooth (talk) 04:33, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
<undent>Not sure what you mean by BLP issues. The problem with just changing it to 100 is that the cited story says, "... focuses on about 100 grades, including some that were reportedly changed from F's into passing marks, a school official said yesterday." So, it appears to me that the auditors were looking at 100 initially but were vague about how many might be Fs changed to passing. I think I'll soften it to say, "... claimed that the school sometimes changed Fs to passing grades." If you disagree, we can discuss further. By the way, I'm almost done. I have one more little section to check, and then I can sign off on the copyedit. Finetooth (talk) 06:11, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
[edit] More citation dates
I'm done. I don't think it possible that I caught everything, but I tried to be thorough. The citation dates are still not as complete as they should be. For example, citation 33 probably has a date associated with the news story. Beyond that, most cited source documents on the web will have dates on them somewhere. Not all do, but if you poke about, you will often find them. I tracked down the one for citation 13 and added it. Since the date was a month and a year (not a complete date and not and day and a month), it did not get autoformatting. I think you can probably find dates for most of the rest of the documents. Anyway, that's it. I'll sign off, and perhaps a proofreader will come in after me, though, as you have seen, LoCE is under a big pile of stuff. If you have any questions, I'll be around. Just give me a holler on this page or my user talk page. Good luck with the FAC. Finetooth (talk) 06:37, 10 January 2008 (UTC)
- Hey, thanks for the work. You did some great stuff. I think several of the dates got reverted per the above discussion, but I will go ahead and add them back in. Thanks again, though. SorryGuy Talk 05:29, 11 January 2008 (UTC)