Talk:Peter Roy Maxwell Drummond

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A fact from Peter Roy Maxwell Drummond appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know? column on 6 January 2008.

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Thanks for the partial revert. I'm a scientist, and I'm sure we were trained to put citations before the punctuation. I guess I'm one of the editors who prefer the style of journals such as Nature, which place references before punctuation, which seems to me to be a much more logical place for them. But I'd begun to notice that much of wikipedia does it the other way, and so I re-checked WP:CITE (actually before I found your revert) and discovered I'd misread the policy last time around (wishful thinking I guess?) While I still prefer the "other" way, I agree consistency is paramount, so I came to revert my edits and found you'd already done it.

I don't agree however that "returned ... again" is redundant. He actually returned to Britain twice, first from Sudan and secondly from Australia (presumably, although the text doesn't actually say explicitly that he went; it's very easy to misread RAAF as RAF and wonder how he can be returning when he's already here - if you see what I mean). As it stands, the article has two almost consecutive sentences which both effectively begin "After returning to Britain, ....". I felt that this didn't read well and was potentially confusing. Adding "again" seemed the simplest way to emphasise that he was returning for the second time. However, I not that fussed about it, so if you prefer the article as it is, or can suggest an alternative way to clarify it, then that's OK with me.

Also, in many articles, I've noticed a certain lack of consistency with commas. Here we have "After returning to Britain (no comma) Drummond...." and "Returning to Britain, he ...." I think the comma is correct in both places. Any thoughts? --Romney yw (talk) 10:58, 21 February 2008 (UTC)

Heh, I very much appreciate the way you put things here. If it will make you feel any better, I did check my recollection of WP:Cite before that partial revert, but obviously was still too quick...! Re. your other points, well, I must still be a bit close to this one, not noticing the repeated 'returning'. Looking at it afresh, I tend to agree on both that point and the one about the commas; in fact I wonder now whether that second 'returning to Britain' is really necessary. Both sentences indentify locations in Britain, but 'London' is particularly obvious. How do you feel about this:

After returning to Britain, Drummond attended the RAF Staff College, Andover, graduating in April 1923. Seconded to the RAAF in June 1925, he served as Deputy Chief of the Air Staff until 1927, then as Director of Operations and Intelligence until November 1929. He graduated from the Imperial Defence College, London, in December 1930.

Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:32, 21 February 2008 (UTC)