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[edit] Zab Judah

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I've listed this article for peer review because, I completely rewrote the entire article and added sources where needed.


Thanks, Rvk41 (talk) 14:30, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

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Comments

  • Several citations need formatting properly using a {{Citation}}  or {{Cite web}} template (please use either one, not a combination of both types of template throughout the article).
    • Specifically, current refs 1, 2, 31 are missing full information and need access dates.
    • Also, what makes current ref 33 reliable? It is a GeoCities website. Please see Wikipedia:Verifiability.
  • There doesn't seem to be any information on his early life, childhood and education.
  • There are lots of short stubby sub-sections under the professional career section, is it possible to merge any of these to improve overall flow?
  • Add citations to the infobox.
  • I have noticed an inline URL in the Personal life section, which is not formatted using the <ref> tags.
  • Looks good overall, except for those things. I do recommend a full copyedit by an editor new to the text, please see Wikipedia:Peer review/volunteers and Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Members for lists of people who can help.

Wackymacs (talk ~ edits) 17:56, 26 May 2008 (UTC)