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[edit] Rings of Uranus
I've listed this article for peer review because it was expanded significantly and needs input from editors not familiar with text. Also, please, rate it. I think it now deserves B-class.
Thanks, Ruslik (talk) 07:55, 26 May 2008 (UTC)
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[edit] RJHall comments
Overall a nice piece of work. I only found the most minor of nit-picks.
- "aerodynamical drug" => probably meant drag.
- It seems odd that the Nu and Mu rings are spelled out, while most of the remainder are in Greek characters. I checked the Showalter and Lissauer (2006) reference, but found no mention of these two rings. So that might not be the appropriate reference. The USGS nomenclature pages do mention the new names, but they also uses lambda rather than λ, for example.[1][2] Maybe Mu and Nu could be made consistent (μ, ν) with the others?
- "They are brightest and widest 30° from the apoapsis and dimmest and narrowest 30° from the periapsis." Does this mean they have dual maxima/minima to either side of the apoapsis/periapsis? Otherwise perhaps you could clarify if this is leading or trailing those orbital positions?
- An em-dash/en-dash doesn't seem appropriate for "During a ring plane—crossing" (in multiple locations in the text). Should it be a hyphen? Likewise for "micrometre–sized".
- First occurance of micrometre should be wikilinked. "power law" should be wikilinked.