Wikipedia:Peer review/Manitoba Hydro/archive1

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[edit] Manitoba Hydro

I would appreciate any comments. I've looked at the criteria:

  • Well-written - That's my big concern. Is my prose "brilliant" or even readable? Organized?
  • Images - I need at least one moreof the company logo, I'd like to get one of Limestone GS (plenty of pictures around but none that I can get into the PD, so far)
  • Length - I think it's about the right length. I suppose I could exhaustively list every CEO, but I find that sort of thing dull and I can't imagine it's of general interest - some MH CEOs may have their own articles, I should link them here.

Is this even the kind of article that could be featured? Is it even interesting enough or is it just one more company article? I'd like to get some bold collaboration here. Thanks,--Wtshymanski 22:09, 16 May 2005 (UTC)

Definitely a reasonable topic for a FAC, and it's looking pretty good. The length appears to be about right currently. I added the company logo that I got from their website, if you manage to find a larger logo that would be good. I think at least one more photograph would be helpful. As well, I think that the introductory paragraph should be somewhat longer (see Wikipedia:Lead section). Finally, there are a fairly large number of one- and two-sentence paragraphs that should probably either be expanded or merged into larger paragraphs. JYolkowski // talk 23:30, 16 May 2005 (UTC)
Thanks for the detailed and specific comments. I was leery of using artwork off the Web site but I suppose it's fair use. I am trying to get some images that can be put into PD. One-sentence paragraphs are a particular stylistic weakness of mine; I shall work on these. --Wtshymanski 01:05, 17 May 2005 (UTC)
The page is very good, though more images would help. Slightly unrelated to this article is that I would like to see some articles on the major generating stations and other facilities and projects, or at least red links indicating which ones might someday have their own articles. - SimonP 20:06, Jun 4, 2005 (UTC)
Manitoba Hydro does have good descriptions of each of the stations which could be digested down to articles for Wikipedia - lots of work, but possibly of enough general interest to be worth doing. --Wtshymanski 20:29, 4 Jun 2005 (UTC)