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[edit] Absinthe

I would like a fresh set of eyes to look over the article. To check if the lead section is effective. To make sure grammar and spelling are accurate and there are no weasel words. I'm unsure how well it flows for those who don't know the topic and if everything is understandable and NPOV or if areas need to be moved or expanded. Any other comments are welcome. Ari 18:39, 30 March 2006 (UTC)

• On the lead--paragraph 1 "Sometimes incorrectly called a liqueur, absinthe does not contain added sugar and is a liquor or spirit." but in paragraph 2 "absinthe has a taste similar to other anise-flavored liqueurs." By saying "similar to other anise-flavored liquers" implies that it is a liqueur. This is something that you should clear up.
• In the preparation section--the like to the traditional ritual should be in the form of a note. Its current marking is distracting.
• The etymology section is very awkwardly placed. Going from 'revival' to 'controversy' is a natural flow, but the etymology secton breaks this up, and doesn't make sense in its position. Perhaps place it as the first section, or in another more fitting place. Hope this helps. PDXblazers 23:42, 30 March 2006 (UTC)

Thanks that does help, I'll work on fixing that. Ari 00:16, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

• May I suggest fixing of the red links... -Osbus 03:43, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

Not a bad idea, I'll get on that as well. Ari 04:20, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

I've edited all the current suggestions into the article. Ari 21:56, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

• I suggest going through the article and checking to make sure the links aren't leading to redirects or disambiguation pages. Just in the first couple of sections, addictive, psychoactive, adulteration, and wormwood don't take the reader straight to where they should be going. That's something I hit a lot of articles for when they are Featured candidates. Kafziel 23:39, 31 March 2006 (UTC)

Thanks for the suggestion I've gone through and disambiguated as many as I could find. Ari 20:40, 1 April 2006 (UTC)

• Great article my only suggestion is that you rephrase the lead sentence "In fact, high alcohol content and a suggestive reputation are now considered to be its most active ingredients". Cedars 07:14, 1 April 2006 (UTC)

Thanks for the grammar corrections. I changed that sentence slightly but I'm not sure if it made it any better. Ari 20:40, 1 April 2006 (UTC)

Comment Extremely readable, great prose. Any chance of bigger pics for images 2/3/4 (Anise / Grande Wormwood / Reservoir glass)? --PopUpPirate 23:23, 6 April 2006 (UTC)

They are a bit small. Ok I removed the size constraints to enlarge them.Ari 17:12, 7 April 2006 (UTC)

• The article is really looking excellent. If and when you want to nominate it as a featured article, I'll be happy to support and help however I can. Kafziel 17:18, 7 April 2006 (UTC)

Thanks. On the talk page Katefan showed interest in expanding the arts and literature section. Since there are entire books writen on the subject the expansion will make a more complete article. After that I think a nomination might be in order. Ari 18:00, 7 April 2006 (UTC)