Talk:Pat Lawlor

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[edit] Inappropriate Tone

This article is written in a very non-objective tone. Phrases like "Pat had another trick up his sleeve" and "Road Show, a brilliant game that..." make the article read more like sensationalist propaganda than an encyclopedia article. — KieferSkunk (talk) — 19:47, 20 January 2007 (UTC)

As much as I think Lawlor is da Man, I agree fully. I might tackle this if I get chance, though if not I'm hoping to make a Wikiproject Pinball soon, and if so we can lay don som guidelines for pinball bios. Fractalchez 21:34, 8 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Tone

Perhaps some of the language is overdone, but I think it could be fairly easily cleaned up. A truly objective tone in dealing with topics like pinball seems kind of disingenuous, though, considering that if Lawlor's game's weren't brilliant and hence enormously successful, he wouldn't warrant an article in an encyclopedia in the first place.