Talk:Orava (castle)

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There are a number of phrases and words throughout that suggest that the writer's native language is not English. It is otherwise well-written, but clarity evaporates in the face of these elements. Examples:

The first black-and-white famous film should probably be worded "The first famous black and white film". Since there is no form of motion picture film preceding black and white, it probably would be sufficient to say, "The first famous film". However, the writer does not directly identify this film, and I question whether Nosferatu was in fact the first film to become "famous".
The natural formation "Castle cliff" - limy spur 112 m high, modeled by the Orava River and its right tributary brook Racova, was inhabited in the Primeval Ages has a number of issues, specifically:

"castle" in "Castle cliff" should probably not be capitalized; if it is a specific proper name for this local feature, then both castle and cliff should be capitalized. Either way, there is no reason to use quotation marks here unless it is an actual quotation, in which case the source should also be noted.
Is limy spur correct usage? Limy could refer to the soil content of the spur, but more likely the writer meant limestone.
Is right tributary brook correct usage? Isn't it correct to refer to a tributary's relationship to the larger river in terms of compass direction? Or is the writer meaning something else? At any rate, the structure is awkward. I suggest, "...modeled by the Orava River and the Racova, its [compass direction] tributary...".
What does the Primeval Ages refer to? Generally this is used as a synonym for "prehistory", but is rarely capitalized. In an article about an object that was built and occupied during very specific periods of history, this usage seems incredibly vague.

I have been unable to find the word towerntury in any dictionary or encyclopedia. It is not a word used in architecture or the science of military fortification.
The phrase last shelter should not be in quotation unless it is actually a quotation, in which case the source should also be noted.
Much of the subsequent description of the castle seems to require that the reader already be familiar with the castle's layout and construction history. The writer uses terms like Middle Castle and Upper Castle without explanation.
None of the personages involved in the castle's history currently have Wikipedia articles. In such a case, it is probably advisable to incorporate information about these individuals into this article.

Canonblack 20:32, 18 January 2006 (UTC)

The person who added this text was a "one-time" Slovak contributor, who has used automated translation (probably). You do not have to discuss these obvious mistakes, just fix what you deem necessary. Juro 02:16, 20 January 2006 (UTC)