Talk:National Assembly of the Philippines

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National Assembly of the Philippines was a good article nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There are suggestions below for improving the article. Once these are addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake. Reviewed version: May 17, 2007

[edit] GA assessment – failed

Thank you for nominating this article as one that may meet the Good Article Criteria. As you will see I have failed the article at this time. I understand that failure of a GA nomination can be a little frustrating but I urge you to continue with the article to get it to this status. I note that whilst the article is quite well referenced with numerous inline citations it suffers particularly in terms of grammar (thus failing the first of the Good Article Criteria points) – and most especially in the area of length of sentences and punctuation.

In addition the Lead should be able to stand alone as a concise overview of the article, establishing context, summarizing the most important points, explaining why the subject is interesting or notable, and briefly describing its notable controversies, if there are any. This article's lead is currently not inclusive of all of the important or controversial points of the article.

I would like to help a little more by giving you one or two examples of the problems such as:

1. The sentence in the Lead which includes (The two National Assemblies were not a continuation of each other, as the Philippine Commonwealth's National Assembly was created under the 1935 Constitution, which went into exile at the advent of the Second World War in the Pacific, while the Second Philippine Republic's National Assembly was created under the 1943 Constitution, which established a nominally independent Republic of the Philippines recognized mainly by the Axis powers.) is to long and needs to be broken down and rewritten for grammar/content. Amongst other things it currently reads as if the constitution went into exile.
2. Similarly this sentence construction is choppy and needs rewriting (Prior to 1935, the Philippine Islands, which was an insular area of the United States had the bicameral Philippine Legislature, established in 1916 under a U.S. federal law – the Jones Law.) – for example do you mean had (as in to have) or ran under the auspices of or something else?
3. There are many such examples in the document. These should be completed before you go into re-writing the lead section.

I am sorry for being the bearer of bad news – but I hope my comments will assist editors in reaching GA status and I urge you to continue as further work on the article will get it to GA and there is no reason it could not also reach FA in time. Cheers--VS ^talk 07:29, 17 May 2007 (UTC)