Talk:Made in the Dark

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BetacommandBot (talk) 22:59, 22 December 2007 (UTC)

[edit] Points

Look at the use of commas, semi-colons and colons, and put the references at the end of sentences, and not in the middle.
There are a lot of quotations in the article; maybe you could paraphrase a few of them (because it makes it seem less of a fan page). Only here to help... :)--andreasegde (talk) 23:00, 23 February 2008 (UTC)

I'll answer here quickly:
  • "Look at the use of commas, semi-colons and colons" - I'll fix the grammar :)
  • "put the references at the end of sentences, and not in the middle" - I decided to attribute every quote used so that no information is challengable and so it's clear which source is being used where because in certain places I've used multiple sources that talk about one thing. Can we find a middle ground? :)
  • "There are a lot of quotations in the article; maybe you could paraphrase a few of them" - I'll try to incorporate them into prose better.
It is rough to hear it seems like a fan page but I do understand your comments are coming from a constructive place :). I'll take care of the points you've raised tomorrow. Thanks for taking the time to look at it :). Seraphim♥ Whipp 01:27, 24 February 2008 (UTC)
Ok. I won't be able to finish the work I started until the beginning of March. I did do a few sections though. Let me know what you think :). Seraphim♥ Whipp 23:28, 24 February 2008 (UTC)

I've been through the article and it's shaping up nicely.

  • "Look at the use of commas, semi-colons and colons"
  • Y But I'll go over it again with a fine tooth comb to make sure it's perfect tomorrow.
  • "put the references at the end of sentences, and not in the middle"
  • Y Found a middle ground there
  • "There are a lot of quotations in the article; maybe you could paraphrase a few of them"
  • Y Mostly paraphrased although some quotes have been left alone because they provide a better encylopedic wealth of infomation the way they are.

Have I done enough to create a GA article? Seraphim♥ Whipp 03:07, 3 March 2008 (UTC)

[edit] GA on hold

  • "pop band, Hot Chip" - comma not needed here
    Y Done
  • "in the week of 10 February 2008[2]" - generally, you need some punctuation under the ref, so here you could just move it to the end of the sentence. Also, interesting you mention UK and then Australia...didn't chart in the US or anywhere else more significant than my place? :)
    Y Done
  • Yay! Someone using Metacritic! (Don't mind me...)
  • "The second single to be released from this album" - just "the second single released" will do fine
    Y Done
  • "and tried to make the album sound not "quite so homemade"" - you're using the present tense here, so tried --> trying
    Y Done
  • "To achieve this, the recording of Made in the Dark took place in studio, live on stage and in a number of different environments.[6] The album was partly recorded in Joe Goddard’s bedroom as a duo with Alexis Taylor and then overdubbed with parts of the rest of the band playing." - can you reword this...it kinda jumps from "yes, bedroom" to "no, bedroom" and I'm jumping on the "OMG confused" bandwagon. :(
    Y Done - That actually wasn't my wording as it was changed here. However, my version was too quotey and Plum did a great job of reducing those :) Seraphim♥ Whipp 12:03, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
  • In the "Hot Chip chronology" part of the infobox the albums shouldn't be in bold
    Y Done
  • Try and paraphrase a bit more and quote a bit less in the Musical style section.
    Y Done
  • "He also said that there was one track in development" - it's been released...which track was it?
    Y Done
  • "so they do something they’ve "never tried before."" - this really doesn't need to be quoted
    Y Done
  • You don't need to wlink to wikt:restless, etc...we know what that means
    Y Done
  • "has been explained by Alexis Taylor" - just Taylor
    Y Done
  • "that he has grown up listening to, such as Prince's Sign o' the Times and music that Joe Goddard" - "that he grew up listening to", and just Goddard
    Y Done
  • "eclectic music has been his and Joe Goddard's first musical background and inspiration" - the source says "eclectic music has been our first musical background", so quote literally, using [his] if necessary
    Y Done
  • "after guitarist Al Doyle, toured with LCD Soundsystem" - remove comma, just Doyle
    Y Done
  • "Goddard has said, "it was a brilliant time" and that he couldn't move for 15 minutes and told Alexis who wrote down words to go with his experience." - ref?
    Y Done
  • "Concerning lyrics of the album as a whole..." - this should go at the start of the section?
    Y Done
  • "Taylor states that calling the album, Made in the Dark," - don't need commas
    Y Done
  • Less quote more prose in the title section
    Y Done
  • Merge the first few paras of the Kylie Minogue controversy section into one
    Y Done
  • "planning to give Ready for the Floor" - songs go in quotes, not italics
    Y Done
  • A few more review comments (from those listed in the infobox) would be good.
    Y Done

This is quite well done. Certainly excellent content. You should go for FA some time (if you've got enough time now that you're an admin!). Leave a note on my talk page when done with this. Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 09:20, 7 March 2008 (UTC)

And btw, format the dates to Day Month Year per MOS :) Will (talk) 09:24, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
You can do it either way...depends on where you are. But you're probably right, being a pom and all. :) dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 09:32, 7 March 2008 (UTC)
Everything done :). Seraphim♥ Whipp 00:40, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
Passed. Good luck with FAC, should you go there! (But to through PR first) dihydrogen monoxide (H20) 00:54, 8 March 2008 (UTC)


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