Talk:Laurentian High School
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[edit] Neutrality / Clean-up
I see some issues of lacking NPOV and the need of a clean-up with this article. My concerns about neutrality come from declarations like "We were the undefeated champions at the sport", and the clean-up is just necessary. Maybe 30% of the article isn't really about the school, and the article doesn't read as an encyclopedic article. Somebody get out the broom! --Deenoe 14:05, 4 January 2007 (UTC)
- I started to clean it up, but there are just too many "rah-rah" statements in the article. eg: "It was a very sad moment for Laurentian as he was well known for the effort he put into making Laurentian High School a better place to be. " If I took out most of these types of sentences, the article would end up being really small. This article really needs an expert (a Wikipedian who went to the school). So the edits I made were fairly small and cosmetic. Thomas Dzubin Talk 13:15, 22 February 2007 (UTC)
I've done a major copyedit and added details about the early music program based on info supplied by one of the first band members. I also corrected the lyrics of the school song (original lyrics). If anyone has facts about the football program or a brief history about other clubs at LHS, such information might give the piece more balance. I removed personal opinion as much as I could without losing the essence of the article, recognizing that an earlier contributor had wonderful memories of his or her times at LHS and the people there.Rudnitski 12:31, 10 June 2007 (UTC)
