Portal:India/Selected article candidates/Technopark, Kerala

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[edit] Technopark, Kerala

Strong Support - This article provides extensive information about one of India's most important IT parks. I believe it will be very helpful to general readers, students and business professionals alike and hence I am nominating it for Selected Article status. Ajaypp(I am here..) 12:18, 22 February 2007 (UTC)

  • Support- Technopark is one of the biggest Technological districts in India and it will help everyone who is researching about the place Harig
  • I would be willing to support if the "Facts at a glance" section is cleaned up. I will prefer a tabular format over the current unformatted text. Also consider uploading the free images to commons and replace the gallery with {{sisterlinks}}. — Ambuj Saxena (☎) 06:52, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
    • Check markY The tabular format has been put in.
    • Free images have been loaded up into the Commons. Ajaypp(I am here..) 07:53, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Support Strong Oppose : The article has been greatly improved, but it needs a little more effort before it can be selected on the Indian portal. The article concentrates too much on infrastructure, that it leaves out all other aspects of life in Technopark. More information should be included on events like tech-a-break. The article also lacks out on describing the work culture in the campus, its socio-political influence, controversies regarding it if any, etc . The article could also use some copy-editing. The "Facts at a Glance" section should be retitled suitably and prose-ified, IMO.--thunderboltz(Deepu) 06:58, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
    • Check markYA section on Tech-a-Break has been added as suggested.
    • We can also comment on the work culture and socio-political relevance of Technopark, but I feel they will be very qualitative. IMHO. Ajaypp (I am here..) 07:53, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
      • Check markYSections on work-culture at Technopark and the Economic/Social relevance of Technopark have been added. Ajaypp (I am here..) 22:11, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
  • I was about to support, but I'm afraid I have to change to Strong Oppose as part of the article seems to be a copyright violation from the technopark website. The technopark club details are taken verbatim from here.--thunderboltz(Deepu) 10:23, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Check markY - The section has been copy-edited to ensure that no material has been duplicated. However, the list of activities and facilities has been retained to maintain factual correctness. Ajaypp (I am here..) 18:13, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Support- Technopark is the biggest IT park in India and an important IT investment destination. This nomination will help companies who are loking to invest in India - Robin —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Robin a p (talk • contribs).
  • Object Support: Good effort. A little more copy editing is needed. That can be surely achieved on the way.
The article needs to be expanded a little more. Here are my comments on the current version:
  1. There is no space given after full stop and commas in certain places.
  2. The details of the buildings can be given in tabular form.
  3. The section 'New Projects' should be cleaned up. Several bolded words are not preferable. Bolding can be restricted to Phase II, Phase III and Phase IV. We can also consider making those as subheadings.
  4. The facilities for entertainment in the campus is not mentioned. The activities of the Technopark club can be included.

Cheers, -- Rajith Mohan (Talk to me..) 08:34, 23 February 2007 (UTC)

    • Check markYThe tabular format has been put in.
    • Check markYThe "New Projects" section has been cleaned up as suggested. Ajaypp(I am here..) 08:42, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
    • Check markYThe content pertaining to Technopark Club and other cultural activities has been updated Ajaypp (I am here..) 08:57, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Support- With the addition of Thejaswini, Technopark's fame has sky-rocketed. More IT and ITES firms will now queue up. I extend my full support towards this - Diliphere
  • Comment The gallery is unnecessary. Should be removed/ images properly incorporated within the body of the article.--Dwaipayan (talk) 08:59, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
    • Check markY - The gallery has been removed and pertinent images have been embedded in the article. Ajaypp (I am here..) 13:08, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment Needs copyedit. Numbers and units should be separated by Non-breaking space. I have done it in the article at one instance as example. Please follow this. Also "sft" has been used sometimes to denote square foot. It should be sq ft. Please see Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Acronyms_and_abbreviations — Do not assume that your reader is familiar with the acronym or abbreviation you are using. The standard writing style is to spell out the acronym or abbreviation on the first reference (wikilinked if appropriate) and then show the acronym or abbreviation after it, in parentheses. This tells readers they will probably find it later in the text and makes it easy for them to refer back to it. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 13:43, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
    • Check markY - Non-breaking spaces have been inserted. Copy-edit for the abbreviation of square feet has been completed.Ajaypp (I am here..) 15:50, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Well, Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Acronyms_and_abbreviations applies to all the abbreviation, not only sq ft. Yes, there are sometimes problems, but this should be followed as far as possible. For example, in this article, what is CAD and ERP? That ITES is Information technology enabled services has never been explained. In fact, IT is Information Technology has not been indicated. TCS links to a disambiguation page, please link to proper page. Also, happened to spot one or two instances where citation superscript did not immediately follow punctuation mark. These are Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style issues that should be addressed. Otherwise the article looks pretty good. Preferably, embedded external link (like this one in the article: Ginger) should be avoided. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 16:10, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Also, author and publisher info should be added to cited references whenever such info is available, eg name of reporter/author etc. Since the article uses cite web or similar templates, it'd be easy to add such information. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 16:16, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Remaining abbreviations have been removed or explained with appropriate expansions towards the beginning of the article.
Check markY - Disambiguous references have been corrected. Ajaypp (I am here..) 17:05, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Copy-edit corrections made to citation spacing. Ajaypp (I am here..) 17:12, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Inline links, except those pertaining to single use facts - where citation/external linking does not seem relevant - have been removed. Ajaypp (I am here..) 17:50, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Author information has been added to citations wherever available. Ajaypp (I am here..) 18:48, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment Some more citation in the section "Technopark and Trivandrum" (it reads a bit fancy!), and the article should be ready for selected article status. Regards.--Dwaipayan (talk) 05:54, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Additional citations added as suggested. Some of the content is analysis drawn on available facts and cannot be cited readily. Ajaypp (I am here..) 18:46, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
  • Comment Photographs of Technopark Club and TBIC could be included in the respective sections.Diliphere 04:41, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
Check markY - Image of Park Centre, where T-BIC is located, has been inserted. Ajaypp (I am here..) 12:25, 26 February 2007 (UTC)