Talk:Hospital accreditation

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[edit] Tone and style of article

Point taken, Orlady.

Would someone else mind contributing to this article please, in terms of structure and content. The subject is, I think, an inportant one and deserving of an article.

The overall wording of the article seems even-handed and balanced to me, but then again that is only my opinion. Hence, other writers please !!!!!!! Many thanks

Professorial 22:47, 23 September 2007 (UTC)Professorial

I'll outline some of my thoughts on this article, in hopes that someone knowledgable on the subject will be working to improve the article. I notice that the first paragraph does not provide the type of introduction called for in WP guidelines:

Start your article with a concise lead section or introduction defining the topic at hand and mentioning the most important points. The reader should be able to get a good overview by only reading the lead, which should be between one and four paragraphs long, depending on the length of the article. See Wikipedia:Lead section.

More importantly, that first paragraph consists mostly of "motherhood and apple pie" statements about the importance of healthcare. I don't think that very many people would take issue with those statements, but they are unsourced and the tone of the following is not appropriate for Wikipedia:

Hospitals and healthcare services are vital components of any well-ordered and humane society, and will indisputably be the recipients of societal resources. That hospitals should be places of safety, not only for patients but also for the staff and for the general public, is of the greatest importance. Quality of hospitals and healthcare services is also of great interest to many other bodies, including governments, NGOs targeting healthcare and social welfare, professional organisations representing doctors, patient organisations, shareholders of companies providing healthcare services, etc. How quality is maintained and improved in hospitals and healthcare services is the subject of much debate.

Can that be replaced with sourced information about the objectives of hospital accreditation? (To come after, not before, a lead paragraph that tells what accreditation is.) --Orlady 23:51, 23 September 2007 (UTC)

The article has been re-structured to bring it more into line with Wkipedia standards, but work by others would be much appreciated. Many thanks —Preceding unsigned comment added by Professorial (talk • contribs) 16:53, 1 October 2007 (UTC)