Talk:Hmong people/Comments

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Lede needs expansion for comprehensiveness. Several subsections suggested by the ethnic groups template are missing: there is no Culture or Geography section. Uncited statments, sections without citations, and external jumps. --Fsotrain⁰⁹ 00:05, 22 March 2007 (UTC)

This article remains highly convoluted and hard to follow. The language usage is in some places very poor/non-standard English and in others extremely informal/conversational in style. In some sections there are missing details while in others there are too many details that would be better expounded upon in daughter articles. I also sense an air of POV in the "Controversy Over Nomenclature" section that, while not particularly blatant, seems to be sympathetic toward the Green Hmong. For an article this lengthy and with as many references as this one, rewriting/correcting it should be a priority (even if only to ensure proper English usage). I have started but developed a headache already. I encourage other editors to help out.--William Thweatt ^Talk | ^Contribs 17:30, 16 January 2008 (UTC)