Talk:Go Man Go
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[edit] GA Review
Overall, this is a very impressive article! I have a few suggestions, but nothing too drastic. Also, please keep in mind that I've never reviewed a horse article before, nor do I know the first thing about horse racing or breeding. That said, maybe an outsider's perspective is a good thing. Besides, Wikipedia is meant to be for the layman, not the expert. So, without further ado:
- Overall, the article is a little horse-lingo heavy. That's not a bad thing, but it leaves any non-expert on the subject confused. The best (and easiest) way to resolve this would be to wikilink any technical terms, so that if someone doesn't know what it is to be "foaled", they can click the link and figure it out themselves. Other examples include "sired", "dam", "sire", "stud fee", "broodmare sire (maternal grandsire)".
- There's a few cases of unencylopedic prose here and there that shouldbe ironed out. For example: "In those days", "that ever managed that feat", "but eventually this was straightened out", etc.
- "AAAT" is unexplained.
- "Unfortunately, Ferguson later lost the full brother, and mother and father of Go Man Go." is a little confusing. Did he misplace the horses? Did they run away? Also, the wording is a little awkward, so I'm not sure if the brother, mother, and father were all lost in the same way, or at different times, or what.
- What do the asterisks in the Pedigree section mean? No legend is provided.
And that's it! I've put the article's nomination on hold, which gives you seven days. After those 7 days are up, I have to either pass or fail the article. Feel free to drop me a line when you feel you've addressed my concerns. Drewcifer (talk) 21:27, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
- I'm on the road, but should be able to get to these while on the road, and if not, I'll be home Monday night, so they'll be done by Tuesday at the latest. And it's great to have a non-horse person review, otherwise we miss the things that are jargon heavy! thanks muchly for the very helpful suggestions. Ealdgyth - Talk 23:08, 17 April 2008 (UTC)