Talk:Glynn Lunney
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Thank you to Antandrus for amending the middle names you beat me by 10 seconds Stevefrommelbourne (talk) 03:15, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
[edit] Article review
It's a great article as is, but, here's a few things I notice that might improve it:
- A longer into. It should summarize the entire article while presenting most of the main or significant points.
- It can't hurt to have plenty of inline citations. I recommend at least one per paragraph.
- Acronyms should be spelled out the first time (NASA and NACA, for example).
- Second paragraph: what's ``NACA?``
The prose is smooth, good writing. Cla68 04:19, 28 August 2006 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review! I'll make those suggested improvements over the next day or two. MLilburne 08:50, 28 August 2006 (UTC)
[edit] GA review
A couple of minor points that I copy edited, (see article history). Good article there is still room for more expansion especially post NASA. Does the sentence about meeting his wife need to be the opening of the section on NASA. A quote or actual citation from one of his awards would be an enhancement to that section. Gnangarra 05:27, 4 September 2006 (UTC)
- Thank you for your comments! I'll be expanding the article a bit over the next few weeks, and will try to find a quote from one of the awards. MLilburne 15:11, 4 September 2006 (UTC)
[edit] a little over the top
Sure the guy is impressive but the tone of the article strikes me as a little to hagiographic. Cinnamon colbert (talk) 14:30, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
- You have to strike a balance between objectivity and reality; between providing an accurate picture and unfairly playing down what actually happened. I admit it does seem a bit over-the-top, but 99% of the information on this guy is like that. It's an unavoidable side-effect of what he took part in. It would be unfair to him to make "educated guesses" about what "really happened" in order to tone down the article. The most objective information you could probably get on Lunney is probably buried in a KGB file somewhere in Moscow, but good luck getting to it. Besides. I think those terrible pants more than balance it out. (I am a registered Wikipedia user, JohnnyWishbone, I just am on a different computer and am too lazy to log in. :P) —Preceding unsigned comment added by 69.104.228.30 (talk) 16:57, 9 May 2008 (UTC)