Talk:Gerry Bertier

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fix link to remember the titans

culmination--do you mean conclusion?

the research of --research on

Ultimately, Bertier would be forced to settle for gold medals in the Wheelchair Olympics following his tragic 1971 accident.--dont jump ahead, espeically under this category

High School, and --no comma eliminate unnecessary ones throughout

winning many honors for--wording

season was unimaginable--awkward wording

very critical condition.--delete very

id as much as he could help victims of spinal cord injury. --proofread

and Gerry worked with --and he worked

After Gerry’s ‘71 accident, he temporarily lost his courageous and competitive drive. It was very hard for Gerry to realize he would be in a wheelchair for the rest of his life, but as soon as he did, Gerry’s fiery spirit returned.--backtracks to material already stated

Bertier did have a girlfriend, but her name was Becky, and their eventual split had nothing to do with Gerry’s friendships with his black teammates [22]. --very good research

Overall this is excellent. It uses a wide range of sources and combines the information from them into a seamless and coherent article. This is a great story that I knew nothing about. The inclusion of the critique of the film which sets its version against the previously narrated account is especially engaging.

Make the edits recommended for the A. B+ Rudolph2007 (talk) 02:13, 3 March 2008 (UTC)