Talk:Florida Virtual School

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[edit] POV of Article

This article has much valuable info, but makes several unsubstantiated statements and tends to read like an advertisement for Florida Virtual. Alternate points of view and actual statistics and citations would help bring this page to neutrality. - —The preceding unsigned comment was added by MLBbrad (talkcontribs) .

I disagree. There is nothing to advertise (as it is a US government-supported public school). I'm removing your tag. -- WiiVolve 03:07, 23 January 2007 (UTC)

FLVS may be a government-supported school, however, it does have to compete with other schools and as such it does have something to advertise. If you don't want to call it an ad, that's fine... but it's still certainly not NPOV.


Yeah, I also think it reads like an advertisement. It's okay for the article to say positive things about FLVS, but it seems too sugar-coated and written in a persuasive tone rather than an explanative tone. Something got rid of the advert warning; I'm going to put it back up and ask the person to discuss it instead. --Fastman99 00:03, 23 February 2007 (UTC)

[edit] To-Do List

Howdy,

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Thanks! Ec 21:25, 6 July 2006 (UTC)