Wikipedia:Featured article review/Montréal-Mirabel International Airport/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was removed 10:40, 31 May 2007.

[edit] Montréal-Mirabel International Airport

[edit] Review commentary

Messages left at User talk:AlbertR, Canada, Aviation and Airports. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 16:47, 30 April 2007 (UTC)

• This article has only five inline references and this fails (c) "Factually accurate", as the claims in the article are not verifiable
• The 'Today' section reads a bit like a list, and should be completely rewritten. Does not qualify under (a) "Well written" means that the prose is engaging, even brilliant, and of a professional standard.
• The article does not actually have any images of the airport itself. The three images in the article are maps (with one of them being a satellite image). In addition, the images have no captions. This fails criteria 3. It has images where they are appropriate to the subject, with succinct captions and acceptable copyright status.

For these reasons, the Mirabel Airport article should be delisted.Zeus1234 16:01, 30 April 2007 (UTC)

• Delist per nom, large sections are unreferenced, not compelling. --Arnzy (talk • contribs) 05:24, 1 May 2007 (UTC)
  • Please read the FAR instructions; we do not declare Keep or Remove during the review phase. A two-week period is allowed for review and hopefully improvements; if there is not consensus that the article meets criterion at the end of two weeks, it moves to FARC, where you can declare Keep or Remove. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 12:27, 1 May 2007 (UTC)

[edit] FARC commentary

Suggested FA criteria concerns are factual accuracy (1c), prose (1a), and images (3). Marskell 03:55, 17 May 2007 (UTC)

• Remove unless proper copy-editing is done. Here are examples at random from the lead that show why the whole text needs treatment.
  • Don't even like the opening sentence: "Montréal-Mirabel International Airport, (or Montréal International (Mirabel) Airport) (IATA: YMX, ICAO: CYMX) originally called Montreal International Airport and widely known simply as Mirabel, is a large airport located in Mirabel, Quebec, near Montreal and was opened 4 October 1975.", in which the two "ands" make the structure clumsy. Remove all of the ugly bolding but for the title at the start of the sentence.
  • "It was intended to replace the existing Dorval Airport"—Remove the two redundant words.
  • "Technically speaking, it is still the only airport in Canada with sufficient right-of-way that can be expanded to accommodate 50 million passengers per year, though a lack of traffic meant that Mirabel was never expanded beyond its first phase." Remove "speaking". The right of way can be expanded, or the airport? Has meant. Has never been. What is this first phase that we're hit with now? Better to say "has remained ...". "A year", not "per year" would be nicer and consistent with the subsequent sentence.
  • "less than 200,000 passengers a year"—"Fewer than", please.

Not a good start. Tony 10:53, 18 May 2007 (UTC)

• Remove Per my reasons for nominating the article as listed in my original nomination. Zeus1234 16:20, 18 May 2007 (UTC)
• Remove per 1a and 1c. LuciferMorgan 13:44, 26 May 2007 (UTC)
• Remove per reasons stated beforehand. --Arnzy (talk · contribs) 01:21, 29 May 2007 (UTC)

The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article review. No further edits should be made to this page.