Wikipedia:Featured article review/Jean Schmidt/archive1

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The article was removed 21:06, 18 September 2007.

[edit] Jean Schmidt

[edit] Review commentary

User:PedanticallySpeaking, User:John Broughton notified. WP U.S. Congress, WP Biography notified.

This article got a spurt of attention prior to this politician's election, but now it has suffered major linkrot, even for the few in-line references that still exist. Naturally, some of these material dealing with that time period can undergo compression now that the heat is off and 20/20 hindsight kicks in and provides some perspective and maturity about what will still be Important one or two years later. Also, a very large section of "notes" that were links to news articles has just been dumped in the Talk page.--SallyForth123 23:57, 5 August 2007 (UTC)

Please notify relevant editors and Projects with {{subst:FARMessage|Jean Schmidt}} and leave a message here about notifications, per the instructions at WP:FAR. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 00:10, 6 August 2007 (UTC)

• I note that PedanticallySpeaking declares himself on his userpage to be wikibonked and that he has been inactive for several months. If this article remains FA, I suggest, because it is a BLP, that its talk page get a {{maintained}} tag on its talk page with at least one active user listed.--SallyForth123 01:07, 6 August 2007 (UTC)

Thank you for the notification. I think the article is too long by half, that it's not a particularly important article at this point, and that the linkrot significantly complicates the matter. And I have other commitments, so I hope someone(s) with more time and energy is(are) willing to work on the article. -- John Broughton (♫♫) 01:06, 6 August 2007 (UTC)

• Image:SchmidtFamily.gif and Image:Jean Schmidt Clermont Sun.jpg have no fair use rationale. The former is replaceable. Pagrashtak 17:11, 13 August 2007 (UTC)

[edit] FARC commentary

Suggested FA criteria concerns are reference quality (1c and 2d), focus (4), and images (3). Marskell 06:56, 26 August 2007 (UTC)

• Remove, lots of work still needed here, after more than a month. References are unformatted and incomplete (see WP:CITE/ES). SERIOUS lack of citation on GOBS of hard data and direct quotes. WP:MOSBOLD, WP:MOSDATE and WP:DASH issues, and punctuation on image captions needs attention (see WP:MOS). SandyGeorgia (Talk) 22:57, 12 September 2007 (UTC)

• How did this get to be a FA?
  • "two months into her first term"—At the top. Problem is, her term is not defined in chronological terms until later.
  • MOS breach: logical punctuation required for quotes. It's not even consistently wrong through the text.
  • MOS breach: "four-year career"—with the hyphen.
  • "hurting its tax base"—Is that the right verb?
  • "The two also made joint appearances on WCET-TV's Forum on 28 July and WKRC-TV's Newsmakers on 31 July.[19][20][21][22][23][24][25]"—Are all of those references necessary? Looks so nice visually.
  • Stubby paras.
  • Unencyclopedic subtitles, especially in "Special general election" (whatever that is): they read like a policial brochure.
  • Inadequate referencing, e.g., "Schmidt repaid the lobbyist for the cost of the entertainment. Her spokesman told The Columbus Dispatch "Jean specifically asked if this was a reportable gift. We immediately corrected it by paying the full price of the tickets." Her former colleague Raussen blamed Colby. "Here we have a lobbyist who was extremely sloppy."
  • Overall, disjointed. It's the kind of effect you'd get from politically motivated visitors to the site who are out to sanitise the article. Tony 12:19, 17 September 2007 (UTC)

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