Wikipedia:Featured article review/Casablanca (film)/archive1

The following is an archived discussion of a featured article review. Please do not modify it. Further comments should be made on the article's talk page or at Wikipedia talk:Featured article review). No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was kept 14:13, 18 August 2007.

[edit] Casablanca (film)

[edit] Review commentary

Messages left at Films, Clarityfiend, Henry Flower, PhantomS

I just happened upon this article... and it makes me wonder why no one's listed it on FAR until now.

• 1(a) issues include:
  • Tiny paragraphs, especially in the "Sequels and other versions" section.
  • Well-written in spots, but needs a gentle copyedit overall. For instance, there are far too many sentences beginning with "he", "she", "Rick", "the", "there", etc. Many such sentences appear two or three at a time, e.g. "He refuses to give her the documents, even when threatened with a gun. She is unable to shoot, confessing that she still loves him. Rick decides to help Laszlo..."
• Doesn't meet 1(c): three fact tags (one dating back to February), and an unreferenced section, "Censorship in fascist and ex-fascist states", which has been tagged for two months.
• The WP:LEAD is too short, and consists of two lumpy paragraphs.
• Some content amounts to little more than trivia, such as the entire paragraph about an inaccurate depiction of the French Morocco flag.

This page was featured in September 2004. In the original FAC discussion, the supporters appeared to be judging the article by Brilliant Prose standards. szyslak 05:12, 14 July 2007 (UTC)

• Update please? The review is at two weeks; some work has been done, but there are still citation needs, including some direct quotes, opinions, and hard data. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 19:50, 28 July 2007 (UTC)

[edit] FARC commentary

Suggested FA criteria concerns are prose (1a), citations (1c), LEAD (2a), trivia (4). Marskell 08:37, 2 August 2007 (UTC)

Two of the images lack fair use rationales. DrKiernan 14:46, 2 August 2007 (UTC)

I've replaced one and added a rationale for Image:Casabl meetrick.jpg, but should it be replaced with Image:Principal Cast in Casablanca Trailer.jpg? I'm hoping not, because the free-use image does not show interactions between the characters, i.e. Rick and Ilsa are not looking at each other, with Renault in between and Laszlo looking worried. DrKiernan 08:03, 3 August 2007 (UTC)

• Keep I think all the fact tags are now cleared. I had no other unaddressed concerns. DrKiernan 09:09, 10 August 2007 (UTC)

• Work needed. Another ce review is needed. I flagged one nonspecfic "to date" statement, I saw sentences that begin with numbers, and I made a number of WP:DASH corrections. With one final runthrough on the prose, this could be a Keep. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 17:47, 11 August 2007 (UTC)

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