Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Yellowstone fires of 1988

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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted 04:55, 3 September 2007.

[edit] Yellowstone fires of 1988

Self-nom of an article I have been working on. Has been at Wikipedia:Peer review/Yellowstone fires of 1988/archive1 and a number of issues brought up there have been addressed. Copyediting by User:Frutti di Mare and User:Wsiegmund have streamlined the content and improved the prose. What else does the article need to be listed as featured?--MONGO 19:34, 21 August 2007 (UTC)

Great start, but I suggest you run the peer review script by AndyZ on this. For example, the lead is way too long for an article of this length. Try cutting out a para of the lead.Rlevse 23:39, 21 August 2007 (UTC)
Done...I condense it by cutting out a few sentences and combining two of the smaller paragraphs.--MONGO 04:39, 22 August 2007 (UTC)

Comments:

  • The lead section still seems too long to me, for an article of this size. For instance, the second sentence can be more concise, summarizing the causes in more general terms, and possibly combined with the first sentence. Maybe say "largest wildfire in the recorded history of Yellowstone National Park, caused by weather-related factors and past fire management practices that made the park more susceptible." This wording suggested isn't quite right, but a possible idea to work with. Some other edits to make the lead more concise would be good, or if you can possibly cut any details that are not essential from the intro section.
  • A minor detail noticed is linking of units. I have noticed User:Tony1 come through and delink those here: of the World Trade Center&diff=149048733&oldid=144470035 I'm not sure what the guideline is, but would follow his example.
  • The choice of images is excellent. The 2006 photo showing recent conditions adds a lot to the article.
  • The substance of the article and sources look good to me. Don't have any suggestions there. I can't think of anything else. --Aude (talk) 05:45, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
  • Support when suggestions by Aude are doneRlevse 22:22, 30 August 2007 (UTC)
I trimmed the lead a little, but it might need further trimming. I also removed the links to measurements and added a few needed wikilinks.--MONGO 06:06, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
The article looks good with the changes. I can't think of any other suggestions. Changed to support --Aude (talk) 23:45, 2 September 2007 (UTC)
The above discussion is preserved as an archive. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.